You were fairly smooth and natural sounding for a couple of stretches. I think you were a bit nervous and went robotic. But that's ok. You just need speaking practice with native speakers. To me, you sounded like an American newscaster. It's a flat, accent-free pattern. I'd caution you to be careful about up-talking, you did it on one sentence. Overall, a very good job. Keep practicing, you'll get it!

It sounds pretty standard, but you are saying each word separately. This immediately makes your speech sound artificial and robotic.