My name is Lee Jom and I#m 23 years old. Igrew up in a small city called Nanping. I have a sister who is also a University student. I'm about to graduate from the Fujiang University of Technology at which I majored in Electrical Engineering and Automation. In school, I mainly study the electrical control of transmissions ,in addition to this I took other courses such as Motor Elements and Power Supply, Automatic Control Theory and PLC. I am a happy and positive person and I want to live my life to the fullest and to try somthing different. I have learned from my own life experiences that if you never try you will never know. My hobbies include sports and outdoor activities, with Badminton and Mountaineering being my favorites. I really enjoy listening to music, with my favorite singer being Faye Wong I'm a native speaker. The above corrections from Chouette, although very good, had several errors which a native speaker would see. If you were interested in improving your English I would suggest focussing on tenses, prepositions and word order. Very good use of the passive! Something that non-native speakers tend to struggle with!

My name is Lee Hom and I'm 23 years old. I grew up in a small city called Nanping. I also have a sister currently attending a University. I'm about to graduate from Fujiang University of Technology at which I majored in Electrical Engineering and Automation. In school, I mainly studied Electrical Control of Transmissions, in addition to this I completed courses such as Motor Elements and Power Supply, Automatic Control Theory, and PLC. I'm a happy and optimistic person and I want to live my life to the fullest by trying something different. I've learned that from my own experiences, if you never try you will never know. My hobbies include sports and outdoor activities with Badminton and Mountaineering being my two most favorite. I really enjoy listening to music especially with Faye Wong as my favorite singer. This is me. 1. "I have a sister who also is a University student" I changed it to "I also have a sister currently attending a University." because I didn't want "also" in front of "University student" when you never mentioned anyone being a university student. But I would put "also" in front of "sister" meaning you are not the only sibling. * I know a lot of English learners might be confused right now..."Why is "a" be University?...University begins with a vowel..." True, but the way you say it begins with a "Y" sound. here are different examples: it's a yo-yo that's a yule log this is an umbrella I live in a universe I belong in a Union. 2. I was a bit confused if the courses were descriptions of it or titles of the courses. So, if they were titles of the courses capitalize them and you do not need "the" in front of it like in bex's example. 3. "This is me." I know that was probably your style of writing. But we already know that is you. That last little sentence is optional. I think it's better to remove it, but it's up to you. 4. And a few errors, for example "about to graduated".

Many thanks Bex and Niney Chan - your posts were really educative to me too! :)

"i'm a cheerful and positive person. I want to live my life to the fullest." 祝你好运！加油

"I'm Lee Hom, aged 23, from a small town called Nanping. I'm about to graduate at the Fujiang Universuty of Techonolgy where I got a degree in Electrical Engineering and Automation. There, I mainly study Transmissions Electrical Control and attend other courses such as Motor Elements and Power Supply, Automatic Control Theory, PLC. I have a sister who's an University student too. I'm a cheerful and positive person and want to live my life fully [... I'm not sure of this, Lee, you better wait for some other opinion too!...], also trying different experiences: I've learnt that in my life I won't know anything unless I try it. Among my hobbies are sports and outdoor activities, such as badminton and mountaineering which are my favourite ones; I also enjoy listening to music very much – my favourite singer is Faye Wong. This is me." Well, in my opinion you seem to be an interesting person! I love badminton and mountaineering too... :) Best wishes for the interview!