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For my vlog #3: Please correct any error here. :) Hello guys, anyone can correct my english here. By the way, this is conversational and i will upload this in youtube. "It's march 00 (day). Today I'm going to share my experience in distributing the fundraiser card in cagayan de oro city. It was fun and also discouraging. Some people rejected my card, some of them just accepted the card and they don't care the message inside the card. I brought 60 cards to distribute and there are 4 more lefts here. In 56 cards I distributed, I think there were only 2 persons visited my online fundraiser and shared my fundraising campaign on facebook. For you, who had watch my fundraising update in youtube you can watch my video on my fundraising experience in cagayan de oro city. I posted the link below. It was unsuccessful for my fundraising campaign. However, my mother had a successful of removing a stint to her kidney in Cagayan de Oro City. continue.....At least, I tried and it was also a part of my history in achieving my goals. To be honest, I sometimes feel bad that there are only very few friends who had cared my fundraising campaign when i posted in facebook. Or maybe, online fundraiser or crowdfunding is not popular in our country. Last friday, I received a new donation a friend from Texas. And she also claimed a digital painting. I am very glad, surprised and thankful for her very kind donation. I'm going to end this video now. I will update you in my next video. And I hope I will meet my goal. I will end my fundraiser when I meet my goal of $xxxx but I will need $xxxx before june for my Form I-20. So bye guys!" That's it

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Sorry, but this is really too long for an answer. You should post it as a notebook, where there are better tools for correcting it.
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Please help anyone can correct this.

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