My name is Li Hong . I'm 13 years old , and my birthday is on May 19th . These are the age and birthdays of my parents: my father is 35 years old , and his birthday is on October 14th ; and my mother is 33 years old , and her birthday is on May 21st . I have many things to do this term , such as a school trip in May , a speech contest in May 21st ,and an art festival to attend . In short, it's going to be a great month. Note > After "such as ", dont use "etc" because you are just giving a few example to give an idea to the reader , and the reader can't possibly know what the others are from your "etc" Unless , its a series whereby the reader can "see" the series from your examples . > I like fruits that are rich in vitamin C ,such as apples , oranges , grapes , etc. "An Art festival in the afternoon" is not good since you did not even mention the time of the afternoon , which is in the future.

you shouldn't use alot of "and" it's better to put "," those are my parents* when you write a date it should be like 19th of may , 14th of october .. and becouse you added is you need to put a preposition like in art festival at afternoon

My name is Li Hong, I'm 13 years old and my birthday is on May 19th. These are my parents; my father is 35 years old, his birthday is October 14th. My mother is 33 years old, her birthday is May 21st. I have many things to do this term. I am going on a school trip in May, I also have a speech contest on May 21st as well as an art festival in the afternoon. It will be a great month.