Can you revise this short definition I wrote?
I read another person's notes that asked me the true meaning of love to me, and I suddenly got this drive to somehow compose a professional scientific kind of definition by myself :) I know, it's geeky.

Anyway, this is what I managed to come up with:

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A biochemical mechanism within the human brain which involves the fluctuations of hormones and body metabolism, thus occasionally occurring the abrupt actions or in general, altering oneself's way of perceiving environmental stimulus?
'

As my major purpose of signing up here was to improve my English skills in a professional field of science, you know, like writing essays and reports, I really hope I can get some real good help with this one. :)

Any corrections, both about grammatical errors or poor vocabulary choice, are sincerely welcome :)

Question

Can you revise this short definition I wrote?
I read another person's notes that asked me the true meaning of love to me, and I suddenly got this drive to somehow compose a professional scientific kind of definition by myself :) I know, it's geeky.

Anyway, this is what I managed to come up  with:

'
A biochemical mechanism within the human brain which involves the fluctuations of hormones and body metabolism, thus occasionally occurring the abrupt actions or in general, altering  oneself's way of perceiving environmental stimulus? 
'

As my major purpose of signing up here was to improve my English skills in a professional field of science, you know, like writing essays and reports, I really hope I can get some real good help with this one. :)

Any corrections, both about grammatical errors or poor vocabulary choice, are sincerely welcome :)

Answer

I would write this as multiple sentences to make is clearer. Long sentences like this are hard to read and understand:

Love is a biochemical mechanism in the human brain which involves the fluctuations of hormones and body metabolism. It occasionally causes abrupt actions or alters the brain's perception of environmental stimuli.

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Awesome concept!

A biochemical mechanism in the human brain which involves the fluctuations of hormones and body metabolism and occasionally causes abrupt actions or alters the brain's perception of environmental stimuli

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