What do we say"故事情节是这么发展的"in English? Is it ok to say "Here goes the story."
What's the way we translate"故事是这么说的/故事是这样发展的" in English?
I just keep wondering early this morning while i was checking my students essay, in which they are required to share their impression of the song that touched them most. One of the boy students tried to explain the plot, a romantic love story conveyed by singer JamesBlunt. I abstracted his point here-----The first time I heard the song "You're beautiful", I was absoulately touched, which narrates a romantic story. A boy fell in love with a girl at the first sight during their chance encounter on a subway. Knowing that the charming girl had already been someone else's girlfriend, the boy...
After checking his writing, I think that betwen "...,which narrates a romantic story.'and "A boy fell in love...", there is a lack of a necessary phrase to link up these two sentences, in other words, there's a lack of coherence.
Herein, I come up with my confusion mentioned above.

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What do we say"故事情节是这么发展的"in English?  Is it ok to say "Here goes the story."
What's the way we translate"故事是这么说的/故事是这样发展的" in English?
I just keep wondering early this morning while i was checking my students essay, in which they are required to share their impression of the song that touched them most.  One of the boy students tried to explain the plot, a romantic love story conveyed by singer JamesBlunt.   I abstracted  his point here-----The first time I heard the song "You're beautiful", I was absoulately touched, which narrates a romantic story. A boy fell in love with a girl at the first sight during their chance encounter on a subway. Knowing that the charming girl had already been someone else's girlfriend, the boy...
After checking his writing, I think that betwen "...,which narrates a romantic story.'and "A boy fell in love...", there is a lack of a necessary phrase to link up these two sentences, in other words, there's a lack of coherence.   
Herein,  I come up with my confusion mentioned above.

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Hi Chekezoe,

I think the real problem lies in the first sentence: "The first time I heard the song "You're Beautiful", I was absolutely touched, which narrates a romantic story."   The relative clause ("which...") is badly placed; it should follow the thing it gives information about (ie. "the song You're Beautiful").

"The first time I heard the song "You're Beautiful", which narrates a romantic story, I was absolutely touched."  This is the proper sentence, and the story can follow on without an extra sentence to introduce it.

Still, a linking sentence/phrase for clarity is a good idea, so here are some suggestions:

The story goes like this:
The story goes thus:
Here is the story:
Let me tell you the story.

(Note the use of colons in most cases.)

"Here goes" has only a couple of idiomatic uses; it doesn't become part of a standard grammatical sentence.

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I suggest that  follow Peachey's or my advice.

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Jura,
Still thanks a lot.

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Jura, 
Thanks. 
Sorry, it might be something wrong with the way i raise the question that confused you. 
Your suggested correction was one of my possible versions. What I'm thinking about is whether I can link these sentences up in the following way:
The first time I heard the song "You're beautiful", I was absoulately touched, which narrates a romantic story. Here the story goes. A boy fell in love with a girl at the first sight during their chance encounter on a subway...

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You can say: The first time I heard the song "You're beautiful", I was absolutely touched by it.  The song tells us about a romantic story where a boy fell in love with a girl at first sight during their chance encounter on a subway. Knowing that the charming girl had already been someone else's girlfriend, the boy...

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