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Does this sound natural ? My love for my family and my passion for math have determined my life choices. For my entire life, I have lived with or near my large family of eleven siblings and parents. The warm, supportive atmosphere of the family subsequently caused my siblings to not live far from my parental village either, where my parents currently reside too. I have worked as a math teacher for years in Kashmar, a town around twenty kilometers from the village, even though it is much more lucrative to teach in an urbanized city with my Master's degree. Degrees from Canadian universities are highly credible in Iran. So following my passion to work as a math professor in towns such as Kashmar would give me the best possible quality of life; I already have a job offer from a university in Kashmar. Also, to me, growing up in a big family was not just about being surrounded by enormous love and support, but it was also about making my best lifelong friends. I let my siblings in on any of my little secrets because I knew they would keep loving me in any circumstances. They are like my best friends and I want to live my life close to them. Furthermore, my father is already 68 and my mother is 62. I will definitely return to spend more time with them due to their old age. Finally, in a pursuit to create a comfortable life for myself, I built a lemon garden in my home town. The garden will be profitable soon and will provide me with a peaceful place to focus on my scientific work in the future.

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Thank you Joe
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HI, Hannah. Thank you very much for the help
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There might a few little things here and there, but on the whole very natural and very well done!
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Hi! I'd say "The warm, supportive atmosphere of the family encouraged my siblings to not live far from my home village either, where my parents currently reside too." I'm British, so I'd say "kilometres" rather than "kilometers". Instead of "highly credible" maybe "greatly valued" would sound better. "they would keep loving me UNDER any circumstances" It sounds lovely! You have a wonderful family and you love them very much!

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