A cute present 🎁
Zahraa is a generous friend to everyone unless you choose the opposite. The first time we met each other she was recovering from a broken foot. Whenever I meet her I feel that she is like a pure glass of water that you are able to see what is inside. We managed to build a deep friendship in a short time and as my family is going to leave the city where Zahraa lives, I picked her a ring as a gift. She liked it and promised to bring me a gift that I can keep it as a reminder. Her gift was so cute as her well-manners, a box which contains a group of coins from India, Turkey and Egypt where she had visited them before.
She also put three pieces of hand-made objects, a tiny pillow that can be used for pins, a wallet with a butterfly on it and medal shaped as a cone.
I liked her gift a lot and stressed for her that I am dedicated to our friendship which could not be expressed with words or gifts.
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A cute present 🎁
Zahraa is a generous friend to everyone unless you choose the opposite. (I think that "unless you choose to bring out the opposite" is better here. The meaning isn't totally clear.) The first time we met each other she was recovering from a broken foot. Whenever I meet her I feel that she is like a pure glass of water that you are able to see what is inside. ( or "you are able to see through") We managed to build a deep friendship in a short time and as my family is going to leave the city where Zahraa lives, I picked got her a ring as a gift. (Alternatively, you could say "I picked out/picked up a ring for her as a gift") She liked it and promised to bring me a gift that I can keep it as a reminder. Her gift was so cute: as her well-manners, (I am not quite sure what you are saying here. Maybe "her gift was as nice as her manners". As it is here, you can put a colon after cute, and "a box" will come immediately after) a box which contains contained a group of coins from India, Turkey and Egypt where all of which she had visited them before.She also put three pieces of hand-made objects, a tiny pillow that can be used for pins, a wallet with a butterfly on it and medal shaped as a cone.
I liked her gift a lot and stressed for to her that I am dedicated to our friendship which could (can is better here) not be expressed with words or gifts.
Great writing. Most of my corrections are suggestions
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Thanks Broneyn 😊
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Wow! What a beautiful and thoughtful gift!
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Hello Troglodyte,
Thanks I appreciate your kind words and being a usual reader.
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Hiya ᑎᗩDᗩ! WOW! I must say you got a precious gift, noo, actually two precious gifts. One that your friend presented to you that you have shown in the picture and second one is a precious friendship:) Lucky you ᑎᗩDᗩ:)
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