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I need to present a short exposition (5 minutes) of an argumentative essay about solar energy.
Can you help me, check it? please
Good evening Teacher, good evening guys
I’m going to talk about my argumentative essay
The main topic of my essay is solar energy
If you ask me, why do I want to talk about that topic?
The answer is simple: Solar energy is the solution to climate change
In my opinion, it's time to stop using fossil fuels.
Fossil fuels are the planet's number one enemy: air pollution, health problems, climate change
Fossil fuels cause these problems.
In recent years engineering has been developing new solar technology.
For example, Airplanes powered by solar energy, solar cars and solar panels that supply homes of electricity. These advances are important in demonstrating that solar energy can solve the problem of climate change. but there is still a lot of work to be done. Therefore, the biggest challenge that engineers face today is to position solar energy as the energy of the future above fossil fuels.
These are the 3 reasons that support my thesis
First reason: the days of life of fossil fuels are numbered.
According to a study from the International Energy Agency, the oil supply will run out in 53 years, natural gas in 54 years, and coal in 110 years.
Second reason: the problem with solar energy storage is being solved
For example thanks to the Tesla Powerwall battery you can store the sun's energy during the day and use it when you need it.
Third reason: the costs of solar energy have decreased
In India for example, the price of kilowatt per hour of solar energy equals the price of traditional electricity
My conclusion is: if engineers can make solar better technology, reducing their costs, solar energy will be consolidated as the main source of energy on the planet, and fossil fuels will be eliminated as an energy tool.
I elaborated my essay following the hamburger model.
Firstly, I answered the question what is the biggest challenge that engineers face today?
My answer is the essay thesis
Secondly, I established my arguments and examples of reliable sources to support the ideas.
Finally I elaborated my conclusion
The sources that I consulted to elaborate my essay were: international Energy agency, world health organization, U.S Department of energy and this famous newspaper, New York Times.
Thank you for your attention
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Hello communityI need to present a short exposition (5 minutes) of an argumentative essay about solar energy.
Can you help me, check it? please
Good evening teacher, good evening guys
I’m going to talk about my argumentative essay
The main topic of my essay is solar energy.
If you ask me why do I want to talk about that topic,
The answer is simple: solar energy is the solution to climate change.
In my opinion, it's time to stop using fossil fuels.
Fossil fuels are the planet's number one enemy: (they cause) air pollution, health problems, climate change.
Fossil fuels cause these problems.
In recent years engineering has been developing new solar technology.
For example, there are airplanes powered by solar energy, solar cars and solar panels that supply homes of electricity. These advances are important in demonstrating that solar energy can solve the problem of climate change, but there is still a lot of work to be done. Therefore, the biggest challenge that engineers face today is to position solar energy as the energy of the future above fossil fuels.
These are the 3 reasons that support my thesis
First reason: the days of life of (using) fossil fuels are numbered.
According to a study from the International Energy Agency, the oil supply will run out in 53 years, natural gas in 54 years, and coal in 110 years.
Second reason: the problem with solar energy storage is being solved.
For example, thanks to the Tesla Powerwall battery you can store the sun's energy during the day and use it when you need it.
Third reason: the costs of solar energy have decreased.
In India for example instance, the price of a kilowatt per hour of solar energy equals the price of traditional electricity
My conclusion is: if engineers can make solar better technology with solar energy, reducing their costs, solar energy will be consolidated as the main source of energy on the planet, and fossil fuels will be eliminated as an energy tool source.
I elaborated my essay following the hamburger model.
Firstly, I answered the question: what is the biggest challenge that engineers face today?
My answer is the essay thesis.
Secondly, I established my arguments and examples of reliable sources to support the ideas.
Finally I elaborated my conclusion.
The sources that I consulted to elaborate my essay were: The International Energy Agency, the World Health Organization, the U.S Department of Energy and this famous newspaper, the New York Times.
Thank you for your attention
Pretty good grammar, just make sure to remember your articles and watch your capitalization! Good luck speaking. ;)
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