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I want to develop good habits
I have a cloud of bad habits such as staying night, often play games on cell phone and computer. It sucks because it wastesa great deal of time that I should make good use of to promote myself. Today something weird come to my mind and I almost did it. But finally I came back to senses and quit. It means a lot for me cuz this is the first time I try to beat the evil in my mind and I win the competition. I start to believe that I can be a better person in the future if I can stick in.
Thanks for marking, I hope someone can point out where the mistakes are in the article so that I can mend my ways. See you tomorrow!
Hi. Nice job! I rewrote it to make it sound more natural. Many of the things I changed weren't really wrong, they just sounded a bit awkward. There are some parts that are a little vague, and it would be easier to understand your meaning if you included more information. Good job and keep studying!
I have many bad habits, like staying up too late at night and playing games on my cell phone and computer. It sucks because it wastes a lot of time that I could be using to better myself. Today I thought of something strange and almost did it, but finally I came to my sense and quit. (This sentence is a little vague, it would be better if you could describe what that thing was) This meant a lot to me because it was the first time that I tried to beat the evil in my mind and won. I'm starting to believe that I can be a better person in the future if I can stick to it.
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