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Exercise are important In various nations around the world people's weight is rapidly increasing. It is not a secret that, the more you are active in daily life the more you are full of energy. There are myriad benefits from doing exrcise, but as known facts, not only exercise, but there are other things that can help people to become healthier. The workout on a daily basis is necessary for our body. Even spending 30 minutes on walking around has a huge impact on our health. There are also scientistific experiements prove that regular exercise changes the brain's activity and learning skills. besides working out there are also some rules that we have to follow in order to stay healther. We live in informational society where everyone has access to the internet. The people who spending more than four hours on the internet, tend to have problems with sleeping. Moreover, the internet causes insomnia. Insomnia leads to gaining weight, depression and other unpleasant conditions. In conclusion, In order to stay healther we should lessen time that we spend on the internet and attempt to walk, read books and inhale fresh air.

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Exercise are  is important

In various nations around the world people's weight is rapidly increasing. It is not a secret that the more you are active in daily life the more you are full of energy. There is a myriad of benefits from doing exercise, but as a known fact not only exercise but other things can help people to become healthier.
Working out on a daily basis is necessary for our body. Even spending 30 minutes on walking around has a huge impact on our health. There are also scientific experiments that prove that regular exercise changes the brain's activity and learning skills.
Besides working out there are also some rules that we have to follow in order to stay healthier.
We live in an informational society where everyone has access to the internet. The  People who are spending more than four hours on the internet tend to have problems with sleeping. Moreover, the internet causes insomnia. Insomnia leads to gaining weight (could also be 'weight gain'), depression and other unpleasant conditions.
In conclusion, in order to stay healthier we should lessen the time that we spend on the internet and attempt to walk, read books and inhale fresh air.

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