The Nine of May 1945 The Day Of Great Victory!
Hello at all!
Today here be non simple entry. I`ll try explain my thoughts about 05/09/1945.
The ninth of may is the biggest holiday in Russia!
05.09.1945 USSR won Germany in The Second World`s War (how it called in Russia).
When I was young I wasn`t understand value this victory and act of bravery!
When I getting older this day became closer to me like a citizen and man.
A lot of USSR`s people were dead for this victory, for my life and life other USSR`s and Russian people today. It was more than 20 millions people, heroes that gave his life for victory.
The ninth of may is the holiday of happiness and sadness. A lot of children and women lost his parents and husbands. Their life was terrific changed.
I have a lot of thoughts about this day of Victory, but my vocabulary now can`t give me so complex words to explain all my thoughts.
I want to say that very important to remember an act of bravery of USSR`s people and people from another countries that engaged in the War.
No to war, make love!
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The Nine of May 1945 The Day Of the Great Victory!
Hello at all everybody!
The ninth of may is the biggest (here I would use : "most important") holiday in Russia!
On May 9th, 1945 USSR won against Germany in The Second World War (how it is called in Russia).
When I was young I wasn`t didn't understand the value of this victory and act of bravery!
A lot of USSR`s people were dead died for this victory, for my life and life that of other USSR`s and Russian people today. It was more than 20 millions people heroes that gave his their lives for this victory. (You could also say: they were more than 20 millions people, the heroes that gave their lives for this victory)
The ninth of may is the holiday of both happiness and sadness. A lot of children and women lost his their parents (fathers?) and husbands. Their life was terrific changed.(??) [terrific means: fantastic, awesome. I suggest you rewrite this sentence] (could it be: "Their lives were drastically changed"?)
I have a lot of thoughts about this day of Victory, but my vocabulary now can`t give me so enough complex words to explain all my thoughts of them. (No need to repeat "my thoughts" again)
I want to say that it is very important to remember such an act of bravery of by the USSR`s people and people those (using pronouns is a good way to avoid repetitions) from another countries that were engaged in the War.
I hope my tips are useful. I tried to modify as little as possible and to give some alternative forms in the purple brackets.
I hope I didn't forget anything!
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