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Energy solar I have written 2 paragraphs about solar energy Can you help me, check it? please Some people claim that using solar energy is not viable because of its dispersal and storage problems. This is completely false, currently, there are rechargeable batteries such as Tesla Powerwall’s that can store excess energy generated during the day and make it available when needed. For example, in the city of Phoenix, Arizona, the hottest city in the USA, today half a million people heat up and light up at night, when there is no sun, with the energy captured from the sun during the day. On the other hand, there are governments that seem to disagree with the use of solar energy. In the USA, for example, President Donald Trump's administration has raised taxes on solar panel imports, removed his country from the Paris climate change agreement and proposed reviving the US coal industry. Such measures only show that private interests take precedence over the care of the planet. In conclusion, if engineering succeeds in improving current solar technology, reducing their costs and providing efficient ways to use electricity to create storable fuel, solar power will be consolidated as the main source of energy on the planet and fossil fuels will be eliminated as an energy tool. Evidently, the way of life will be different, but perhaps it was not different 100 years ago when people still washed in the rivers and cooked with firewood. The people of that time accepted the new technologies: They rode trains, got on planes, put electricity in their houses, and everything else we have. They were made to believe that oil lamps could not compete with electric light, now we are made to believe that solar energy is not competitive with that of oil. If before we were able to change to a much better world, today we can do exactly the same.

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Very well written!
I've only made 2 notes where it's a little ambiguous and you should consider changing something.


Energy solar

I have written 2 paragraphs about solar energy
Can you help me, check it? please

Some people claim that using solar energy is not viable because of its dispersal and storage problems. This is completely false, currently, there are rechargeable batteries such as Tesla Powerwall’s that can store excess energy generated during the day and make it available when needed. For example, in the city of Phoenix, Arizona, the hottest city in the USA, today half a million people heat up and light up at night, when there is no sun, with the energy captured from the sun during the day. On the other hand, there are governments that seem to disagree with the use of solar energy. In the USA, for example, President Donald Trump's administration has raised taxes on solar panel imports, removed his country from the Paris climate change agreement and proposed reviving the US coal industry. Such measures only show that private interests take precedence over the care of the planet.

In conclusion, if engineering succeeds in improving current solar technology, reducing their costs and providing efficient ways to use electricity to create storable fuel, solar power will be consolidated as the main source of energy on the planet and fossil fuels will be eliminated as an energy tool. Evidently, the way of life will be different, but perhaps it was not different 100 years ago when people still washed in the rivers and cooked with firewood. The people of that time accepted the new technologies: They rode trains, got on planes, put electricity in their houses, and everything else we have ( this is a little ambiguous- perhaps you could say did everything that we have done...or is that what you mean? They were made to believe that oil lamps could not compete with electric light, now we are made to believe that solar energy is not competitive with that of oil. If before (how about - IF IN THE PAST (it reads a little confusing with 'before' )we were able to change to a much better world, today we can do exactly the same.

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