IELTS #8: Starting age for education

In many countries, children begin studying at school at the age of 6 or 7.
Some people believe that children should begin studying at school earlier than this age. What are the advantages of children beginning their studies at a young age?
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There have been intense discussions as to the starting age for education.
Some people argue that schooling should begin earlier than 6 or 7 years old.
There are advantages and disadvantages to this proposal.

For people who support the proposal, it is believed that early education can bring children many benefits.
Indeed, education has become a priority for many parents who seek to secure a good job for their children in this fast-paced society.
They claim that children can be more highly educated as they start education earlier than others.

However, there are downsides of starting education earlier as well.
First, children will be occupied with studies for most of their childhood and do not have sufficient time to play with friends or participate in activities outside school.
Some research indicated that children develop their personality through social interaction.
If children do not learn social skills, they can be immature when they grow up.

Second, children who started cramming education before the age of 6 are likely to have mental problems.
Compared with the past, competition has become increasingly fierce.
Recent statistical data shows that there is a tendency among these children to drop out of school before high school due to severe stress and pressure.

In conclusion, I do not agree that children need to go to school at a young age.
Instead, teachers and parents need to identify the talents of each child and nurture them for their personal and academic achievement.

It's not that people won't understand if you say "rapid society" but it's not the general phrase used for that. I would use "fast-paced" because it's much more common.