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the best party of the world Hi there, for my english class I had to write a children's story. Please help me correcting THE BEST PARTY OF THE WORLD Elisa is a smart and a beautiful girl, she likes many things: dancing, singing and pirates. She wants to be a pirates but her life seems more the a princess because she take ballet class on fridays, also she has a luxue and beautiful room. Also she has parents love her so much. Elisa's birthdays is soon and hers parents are planning the surprise party. They already have had the party invitations printed and invited all friend's Elisa. At night Elisa dreams with a big party with a lots of games, Colorful candies, ballons and pirates. Althought Elisa has all her clothes made specially for her she wants these day a pirate custome and It is the only she aksed to hers parents. The great day has arrived, today is te birthday of Elisa, her mother toke to the hairdresser and now Elisa having her hair decorated as a pirate, and also hers nails has decorated for the occasion. But the thing She doesn't know is having her House decorated for the party. When Elisa comes home she finds all hers friends and they shout: surprise!! the música sounds and the party begins, there are a lot fun to do like games, ballons, bubbles and pirates war. Elisa shocked when sees un the table a big pirate cake. she recived a new gift each a friend arrive, hers friends also are happy because there are many desserts and candies to eat. she has a amazing surprise birthday party After the party Elisa is very happy and give thanks to hers parents for giving this surprise

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the best party of the world

Hi there, for my english class I had to write a children's story. Please help me correcting

THE BEST PARTY OF THE WORLD

Elisa is a smart and beautiful girl. She likes to do many things like dancing, singing and pirates. She wants to be a pirates but her life seems more like the a princess's because she takes ballet classes on Fridays, and also she has a luxurious and beautiful room. Also she has parents who love her so much.
Elisa's birthday is coming soon and hers parents are planning a the surprise party. They already have had the party invitations printed and invited all her friends.
At night Elisa dreams of a big party with a lots of games, colorful candies, balloons and pirates.
Although Elisa has all her clothes made specially for her she wants these day a pirate costume for her birthday and it is the only thing she asked her parents.
The great day has arrived. Today is Elisa's birthday. Her mother took her to the hairdresser and now Elisa is having her hair decorated as a pirate, and also her nails are decorated for the occasion. But the thing she doesn't know is that her house was also decorated for the party.
When Elisa came home she found all her friends and they shouted: "Surprise!!" The music plays and the party begins. There lot of fun things to do : games, balloons, bubbles and pirate wars. Elisa is shocked when sees a big pirate cake on the table. She received a new gift from each of her friends who arrived. Her friends also are happy because there are many desserts and candies to eat.
She had an amazing surprise birthday party
After the party Elisa is very happy and thanks her parents for giving this surprise

THE BEST PARTY OF THE WORLD

Elisa is a smart and beautiful girl. She likes many things, like dancing, singing and pirates. She wants to be a pirate, but her life seems more like a princess's. She takes ballet class on Fridays and has a luxurious and beautiful room. She also has parents that love her very much.

Elisa's birthday is soon and her parents are planning a surprise party. They already had the party invitations printed and invited all of Elisa's friends.

At night Elisa dreams of a big party with a lots of games, colorful candies, ballons and pirates. Although Elisa has all her clothes made specially for her, she wants a pirate costume on her birthday. It is the only thing she asked from her parents.

The great day arrived, Elisa's birthday. Her mother took her to the hairdresser. Elisa had her hair decorated as a pirate, and her nails also decorated for the occasion. But the thing she didn't know is that her house was also decorated for the party.

When Elisa comes home, she finds all her friends. They shout, "Surprise!"

The music plays and the party begins. There are a lot fun things to do: games, ballons, bubbles and a pirate war. Elisa is shocked when sees a big pirate cake on the table. She received a new gift from each of her friends who arrived. Her friends are also happy because there are many desserts and candies to eat.

She has a amazing surprise birthday party.

After the party, Elisa is very happy and give thanks to her parents for giving this surprise.

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THE BEST PARTY IN THE WORLD

Elisa is a smart and beautiful girl. She likes many things, such as, dancing, singing and pirates. She wants to be a pirate but it seems that she's living a life of a princess because she takes ballet classes on Fridays, has a beautiful luxurious room and parents who love her very much.

Elisa's birthday is approaching and her parents are planning a surprise party. They have already had the party invitations printed and invited all Elisa's friends.

At night, Elisa dreams of a big party with a lot of games, colorful candies, balloons and pirates.

Although Elisa has all her clothes made especially for her, she wants to wear a pirate costume on her special day. It was the only thing she asked from her parents.

The big day has arrived. Today is Elisa's birthday. Her mother took her to the hairdresser's and now Elisa is having her hair done in pirate style. She is also getting her nails done for the occasion. However, there is one thing she still doesn't know. Her house is being decorated for the party.

When Elisa comes home she finds all hers friends there. They all shout, "Surprise!" The music starts and the party begins. There are a lot fun things to do at the party. Games, balloons, bubbles and pirates. Elisa is overwhelmed with joy when she sees a big pirate cake on the table. She received a gift from each friend who arrived. Her friends are happy as well because there are many desserts and candies waiting to be eaten.

Elisa is having an amazing surprise birthday party.

After the party, Elisa is very happy and grateful for the beautiful surprise.

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