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a story I wrote this little story, please help me correcting and tell me what do you think about it: I feel nervous when the phone rang; Since that friday at the night, when I was in a bar and I met a girl her name was Katie, I knew a few things about her but for me was enough. So we decided to go my home but the uber didn't come so we went to the corner to wait a taxi, but 3 men attacked us, they robbed us, they were going to kill me but I have the possibility to scape, Katie cried and she shouted my name, she asked me for help, but I had feard and then I ran; I left her with three men, at 2:00 am. I don't know what happened with Katie, but I feel fear when the the phone rings, because I know that os her, looking a way to call me, althought I remove the battery of cell, ir desconnect the phone, she hits the door of my house for to see if this time I answer to her calls for help.

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a story

I wrote this little story, please help me correcting it  and tell me what do you think about it:

I felt nervous when the phone rang since that Friday night, when I was in a bar and I met a girl and her name was Katie. I learned a few things about her but for me that was enough. So we decided to go my home but the Uber didn't come so we went to the corner to wait for a  taxi.  Then 3 men attacked us, they robbed us, they were going to kill me but I had the opportunity to escape.  Katie cried and she shouted my name, she asked me for help, but I had feared for my life and then I ran.  I left her with the three men, at 2:00 am.


I don't know what happened to Katie, but I feel fear when the the phone rings, because I know that it could be her, looking for a way to call me.  Although  I removed the battery of my cell, it disconnected the phone, she hits the door of my house for to see if this time I answer to her calls for help.

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a story

I wrote this little story.  Please help me in correcting this and tell me what do you think about it:

I feel nervous when the phone rings . It was a  Friday night. I was in a bar when I met this girl whose name was Katie. I knew a few things about her which was enough information for me. So we decided to go to my home but the uber cab didn't come so we were waiting for a taxi at the corner of the street. Three men attacked and robbed us. They were going to kill me but I  escaped. Katie was  crying and she shouted out my name, asking me for help, but I was  afraid and I ran. I left her with three men, at 2:00 am.
I don't know what happened to her, but I am terrified when the the phone rings, because I know that it's her, looking for a way to call me, although I have removed my cell phone battery , and disconnected my phone, she bangs the door of my house to see if this time I answer her calls for help.
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mmmm wow :O I dont know what to say/write hahah. First thought comes to my mind is, is it real? Anyway I think all people could write differents things about it but the truth just will be discover when we get there. I hope it helps you heheh D:

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