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Easter is one of important holiday in my country, and luckily I got couple days off from office. I had decided to visit my relatives, therefore I went to the western part of Georgia, my country – where they are living.
At first, I went to the city where my older brother lives with his wife and lovely daughter. The distance from where I am living currently and the place they are staying is quite far, it took approximately four hours to reach the place.
Finally, when later I met them, I was extremely happy to meet my brother’s family because I haven’t seen them for quite long time. The day after, we had visited our grandmother. Our grandmother lives alone in a beautiful village and I haven’t got chance to visit her since last year. On those days in the village, I really spent amazing time with my family.
For me personally, I like village so much and I wish that I could stay for couple weeks even months there. Unfortunately I couldn’t do that because I only had few days off. Then, right now I am sitting on the bus heading back to my city. I delight to see the view from window, while sometimes I read my book – the one I found on village. I am hoping that I will finish reading as the trip will take around six hours.
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Please Help Me to Correct This Story
Hi all,Would you please help me by giving input/corrections to this story? Thank you.
Easter is one of the important holidays in my country, and luckily I got a couple of days off from work. I had decided to visit my relatives, so I went to the western part of Georgia, my country, where they are live.
At first, I went to the city where my older brother lives with his wife and lovely daughter. The distance from where I am living currently and the place where they are staying is quite far, so it took approximately four hours to get there.
Later, when I met them, I was extremely happy to meet my brother’s family because I hadn’t seen them for quite a long time. The next day after, we had visited our grandmother. Our grandmother lives alone in a beautiful village, and I haven't had the chance to visit her since last year. During those days in the village, I really spent an amazing time with my family.
Personally, I like the village so much, and I wish that I could stay for a couple of weeks or even months there. Unfortunately I can't do that because I only have a few days off. Right now I am sitting on the bus heading back to my city. I am delighted to see the view from the window, while I occasionally read my book – the one I found in the village. I am hoping that I will finish reading it as, the trip will take around six hours.
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Hi all, Would you please help me to give input/correction to this story? Thank you. Easter is one of important holiday in my country(one of the most important holidays in my country),and luckily I got (a)couple (of)days off from (the)office. I had decided to visit my relatives, therefore I went to the western part of Georgia, my ( the country )country – where they are living. At first, I went to the city where my older brother lives with his wife and lovely daughter. The distance from where I am living currently and ( to)the place they are staying is quite far, it approximately four hours to reach the place( to reach there)Finally, when later I met them ( finally when i met them),I was extremely happy to meet my brother’s family because I haven’t(hadn't )seen them for quite long time. The day after( the following day/ the next day), we had visited our grandmother. Our grandmother lives alone in a beautiful village and I ( hadn't gotten)got chance to visit her since last year. On those days in the village, I really spent amazing time with my family(* it is correct grammatically but sounds strange. Better would be something like: During that time in the village, i had an amazing time with my family).me personally, I like village so much and I wish that I could stay for (a)couple weeks even months there. Unfortunately I couldn’t do that because I only had few days off. Then, right now I am sitting on the bus heading back to my city. I delight to see the view from window, while sometimes I read my book ( i enjoy seeing the view from my window while reading my book i found in the village)the one I found on village. I hoping ( i hope) that I will finish( i will be finished reading) as the trip will take around six hours. Well done. You are at a great level. I would caution that you pay attention to the tenses of your verbs.
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