April 27, 2019

Not bad! To make this sound more fluent you can say it like this: 

"I went to the dentist and then to the beauty salon. I had my teeth checked first and after that, I had my hair cut.

BUT if you say it like that it sounds more like you are conversing with somebody.

E.g. Person 1: "What did you do today? 

Person 2: "I went to the dentist and then to the beauty salon."

Person 1: "Oh cool! What did you do there?" 

Person 2: "Well, I had my teeth checked first and after that, I had my hair cut." 

You should try to simplify your sentences if you can. A good way to do this is by saying: 

"I went to the dentist today and had my teeth checked. Then I went to the beauty salon and had my hair cut." 

E.g.

Person 1: "Hey, I went to the dentist today and had my teeth checked. Then I went to the beauty salon and had my hair cut!" 

Person 2: "Wow, that's great! How efficient." 

So both are OK - It depends on the conversation context. 

Hope this can help you! :)