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My trip to Poland-Krakow, Auschwitz and Zakopane Last week, I had my journey in Poland for five days. To be honest, I didn't expect to travel to Poland so much at first. I chose Poland because that's not far from Prague. And I only want to visit Auschwitz concentration camp. But I enjoyed my trip in Poland eventually. Krakow is a very pretty city. Not crowded, price is affordable. Poles are friendly and enthusiastic. I was quite impressed by gorgeous girls. Therefore, I asked a Polish girl to take a selfie together in an attempted to get the wonderful memory. I visited Auschwitz on the second day. I was so surprised there were so many people visiting this place. I thought I had come to the Disneyland. I took thirty minutes to get into the museum. In the entrance of concentration camp, there's a sign "Arbeit macht frei" in German. The sentence translate from German is "work makes free". Actually that was the most terrible place in the world before. Pain, starvation, rape and death are a plenty there. Over one million people died in that camp. So I always stayed silent and visited seriously. I visited every block meticulously so I took so long to finish. Victims left too much stuff after they died. Such as shoes, bags, glasses, hair, etc. I felt sad after I finished visiting the museum. People had a wonderful life until the outbreak of war. You can realize how wars influence people so much. What we have to remember is the history so that we can prevent from it happening again. On the third day, I took bus to get to Zakopane, which located in the south of Poland. That's a small town which is surrounded by mountains. That was really tough to climb mountains in this season. Even though in April there are still heavy snows there. So it's dangerous if you don't have equipment for climbing. I was so regretful as I was climbing. I didn't even have good shoes and crutches. So I almost fell down from the mountain several times. There was no turning back at that moment. I had no choice but moved on. It took me four hours to reach top of mountain. But it's worth it because of the beautiful view. I realize that whatever your goal, the only thing to do is to focus on your target and never look back. You'll be surprised that you have made many efforts. Although you haven't reached your goal you understand there's no possibility to give up.

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My trip to Poland-Krakow, Auschwitz and Zakopane

Last week, I had my journey in Poland for five days. To be honest, I didn't expect to travel to Poland so much at first. I chose Poland because that's not far from Prague. And I only wanna visit Auschwitz concentration camp. But I enjoyed my trip in Poland eventually.

Krakow is a quite pretty city. No crowed, price is affordable. Polish are friendly and enthusiastic. The most impressive thing is Polish girls are gorgeous. Therefore, I asked a Polish girl to take selfie together in attempted to get the wonderful memory.

I visited Auschwitz on second day. I was so surprise there were so many people visiting this place. I thought I came to Disney. I took thirty minutes to get into the museum. In the entrance of concentration camp, there's a sign "Arbeit macht frei" in Germany. Actually that was the most terrible place in the world before. Pain, starvation, rape and death are a plenty there. Over one million people dead in that camp. So I always stayed silent and visited seriously. I was visiting every block meticulous so I took so long to finish. Victims left too many stuff after they dead. Such as shoes, bags, glasses and hair etc. I felt sorrowful after I finished visiting the museum. People had wonderful life until outbreak of war. You can realize how wars influence people so much. What we have to remember is the history and prevent from it happening again.

On third day, I took bus to get to Zakopane, locating in south of Poland. That's a small town around mountains. That's really tough to climb mountains in this season. Even though in April there are still heavy snows there. So it's dangerous if you don't have equipment for climbing. I was so regret as I was climbing. I even didn't have good shoes and crutches. So I almost fell down from the mountain several times. There was no turning back at that moment. I had no choice but moved on. It took me four hours to reach top of mountain. But that's worth because the beautiful view. I realize whatever your goal is, only thing to do is focus on your target and no look back. You'll be surprise that you have made many efforts. Although you haven't reached your goal you understand there's no possibility to give up.
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MY COMMENTS: Last week, I had my journey in Poland for five days. To be honest, I didn't expect to travel to Poland so much at first. I chose Poland because that's not far from Prague. And I only wanna visit Auschwitz concentration camp. But I enjoyed my trip in Poland eventually. WANNA is too informal. Krakow is a quite pretty city. No crowed, price is affordable. Polish are friendly and enthusiastic. The most impressive thing is Polish girls are gorgeous. Therefore, I asked a Polish girl to take selfie together in attempted to get the wonderful memory. WORD ORDER: Either "Krakow is very pretty" or "Krakow is a very pretty city." NATIONALITIES: The Poles or Polish people or the Polish people. SELFIE needs the indefinite article (a selfie). IN AN ATTEMPT is a prepositional phrase ending in the noun (an) attempt. "Arbeit macht frei" translated from the German is "Work makes free" (this would help readers who don´t know German). WERE ABUNDANT: you need a past tense verb. DEAD is an adjective. DIED is a past tense verb. VISITED: this is a narrative (telling a story) and so the verb needs to be past simple. METICULOUSLY: because it is an adverb modifying the verb VISITED. STUFF is an uncountable noun (too much stuff). A LIST OF ITEMS: shoes, bags, glasses, hair, etc. (when it ends in "etc." you don´t need "and." SAD is an adverb modifying "felt" (sorrowful is a noun). OUTBREAK needs the definite article "the." My conclusion about your writing is that you would benefit from lessons on the use of the articles "the" and "a/an".

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