Bad Habits
Bad habits consume most of our valuable time. Bad habits make us feel incompetent and unworthy, yet they make us feel better while we are practicing them. Bad habits are often the result of mental cravings to make us feel good and eventually leave important work.
It initiates with a trigger that bring about the terrible feeling we had when we first started practicing the bad habit and how we were able to get rid of that emotion. We often rush to the bad habit whenever we experience that uneasy feeling, thus making it a part of our subconscious.
Therefore, to counter any bad habit, we must be consciously aware of that uneasy feeling whenever it arises and resist the temptation to do the bad habit. With repetitive resistance, the bad habit starts to fade away and eventually we get rid of it. This is easy to say but very hard to follow, because most of the time we are unaware of our own thoughts and feelings. However, with careful personal assessment, we can begin to target our subconscious thoughts.
(Please suggest some ways I could improve the structure of my writing. In addition, I am open to discussion regarding the content)
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Bad Habits
Bad habits consume most of our valuable time. Bad habits make us feel incompetent and unworthy, yet they make us feel better while we are practicing them. Bad habits are often the result of mental cravings to make us feel good and eventually leave important work.It starts (Usually you initiate something)with a trigger that brings about the terrible feeling we had when we first started practicing the bad habit and how we were able to get rid of that emotion. (Not sure what this sentence is saying-- what's "it"?-- and not sure how the last part fits in)We often rush to the bad habit whenever we experience that uneasy feeling, thus making it a part of our subconscious.
Therefore, to counter any bad habit, we must be consciously aware of that uneasy feeling whenever it arises and resist the temptation to do the bad habit. With repetitive resistance, the bad habit starts to fade away and eventually we get rid of it. This is easy to say but very hard to follow, because most of the time we are unaware of our own thoughts and feelings. However, with careful personal assessment, we can begin to target our subconscious thoughts.
(Please suggest some ways I could improve the structure of my writing. In addition, I am open to discussion regarding the content)
Very good overall! Excellent command of the language. You could consider putting in some examples to clarify your points.
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Thank you Sheila. That is exactly what I wanted to convey, you made it clearer. :D
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As Hope O said, your writing shows an excellent command of the English grammar and writing. I'll just comment on this sentence that she had trouble with: "It initiates with a trigger that bring about the terrible feeling we had when we first started practicing the bad habit and how we were able to get rid of that emotion."
I believe I do understand your intent, and suggest the following rewrite. These are my words, and you might choose different ones, but I hope you can see that this is one way to make your point clearer:
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It starts with a trigger that evokes the same troubling emotion we experienced when we first started practicing the bad habit. Subconsciously we recall how we we were able to suppress that emotion with this habit.
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