Writing section of TOEFL iBT practice 2 Most people claim that all careers are important for human society. In my opinion, it is better for students to study math and science because those subjects ar

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Writing section of TOEFL iBT practice 2 Most people claim that all careers are important for human society. In my opinion, it is better for students to study math and science because those subjects are deep related to technological advances. In the following two paragraphs I will explain the two reason why I think this way. First, studying math and science made possible to develop many of the social networks that currently facilitate our work and communication. Thanks to these new tools now we can work altogether with people from other countries and be in touch with relatives who live abroad. I experienced something recently that illustrates my point. Once, while reading about social media I found out that the founder of Facebook needed to create an algorithm in order to understand who do people wanted to accept in their profiles as a “friend”. If it weren’t for those studies, we wouldn’t be interconnected with a lot of people. I think that the whole process required a serious study of math and science whether Facebook staff wanted to provide a really great experience to their users. As long as students continue taking careers that involve math and science, there would be available more sophisticated technologies that will enhance our ways of relating to others. I would appreciate any correction. Thanks in advance.

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Writing section of TOEFL iBT practice 2

Most people claim that all careers are important for human society. In my opinion, it is better for students to study math and science because those subjects are deeply (“closely” might work better here) related to technological advances. In the following two paragraphs I will explain the two reasons why I think this way.

First, studying math and science made it possible to develop many of the social networks that currently facilitate our work and communication. Thanks to these new tools now we can work altogether with people from other countries and be in touch with relatives who live abroad. I experienced something recently that illustrates my point. Once, wWhile reading about social media I found out that the founder of Facebook needed to create an algorithm in order to understand who do people wanted would want to accept in their profiles as a “friend”. If it weren’t for those studies, we wouldn’t be interconnected with a lot of people. I think that the whole process required a serious study of math and science whether so the Facebook staff wanted tocould provide a really great experience to their users. As long as students continue taking pursuing careers that involve math and science, there would will continue to be available more sophisticated technologies available that will enhance our ways of relating to others.

I would appreciate any correction.
Thanks in advance.

The word ALTOGETHER does not suit in the sentence because it is used to introduce a summary when you have mentioned a number of different things, EXAMPLE: the food was good and we loved the music. Altogether it was a great evening.(OXFORD ADVANCED LEARNER'S DICTIONARY)

Writing section of TOEFL iBT practice 2

Most people claim that all careers are important for human society. In my opinion, it is better for students to study math and science because those subjects are deeply related to technological advances. In the following two paragraphs I will explain the two reasons why I think this way.

First, studying math and science ~~made~~ make it possible to develop many of the social networks that currently facilitate our work and communication. Thanks to these new tools, now we can all work altogether with people from other countries and be in touch with relatives who live abroad. I experienced something recently that illustrates my point. Once, while reading about social media, I found out that the founder of Facebook needed to create an algorithm in order to understand who do people wanted to accept in their profiles as a “friend”. If it weren’t for those studies, we wouldn’t be interconnected with a lot of people. I think that the ~~whole~~ entire process required a serious study of math and science ~~whether~~ because Facebook ~~staff~~ employees wanted to provide a really great experience to their users. As long as students continue taking careers that involve math and science, there ~~would~~ will be ~~available~~ more sophisticated technology ~~ies~~ available that will enhance our ways of relating to others.

I would appreciate any correction.

Thanks in advance.

it is better for students to study math and science because those subjects are deep related to technological advances. IN THIS SENTENCE THE WORD "THOSE" IS NOT SUITABLE, BECAUSE THE SUBJECTS WHO ARE DEEPLY RELATED TO ............ ARE MATH AND SCIENCE, SO THE WORD "THESE" HAVE TO BE USED.

Writing section of TOEFL iBT practice 2

Most people claim that all careers are important for human society. In my opinion, it is better for students to study* math and science because these subjects are deeply related to technological advances. In the following two paragraphs, I will explain the two reasons why I think this way.

First, **studying math and science made it possible ***to develop many of the social networks that currently facilitate our work and communication. Thanks to these new tools, now we can work together with people from other countries and be in touch with relatives who live abroad. Recently, I experienced something that illustrates my point. Once, while reading about social media I found out that the founder of Facebook needed to create an algorithm in order to understand what kind of people the users would want to accept in their profiles as a “friend". If it weren’t for those studies, we wouldn’t be interconnected with a lot of people. I think that the whole process required a serious study of math and science whether Facebook staff wanted to provide a really great experience to their users. As long as students continue taking careers that involve math and science, there would be available more sophisticated technologies that will enhance our ways of relating to others.

I would appreciate any correction.
Thanks in advance.

Taking: gerund is used because if there is a verb after the verb continue, gerund o infinitive can be used.

Relating:gerund is used because if there is a verb after a preposition, gerund have to be used.

* TO KEEEP IN MIND: Infinitive is used because gerund can not be used in this case because the verb is not a subject of a sentence.

**Gerund is used because the verb is been used like part of the subject of the sentence.

*** After adjectives is common to use INFINITIVE.

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