Could you check my sentences, please? -46
Could you please check the sentences stated below?If there are mistakes, please correct them.
1. The entomologist found the elusive critters in the forest. (I wouldn't say critters because it is too informal in this context. Maybe insects or creatures since the word entomologist is highly specific.)
2. There are some termite arboreal mounds in this terrain. (Arboreal termite mounds...it's adjective order. Arboreal is an adjective but termite mound is a compound noun. fluent speakers do not split compound nouns....compare eye plastic glasses vs. plastic eyeglasses.)
3. The ornithologist explains the beautiful plumage of male peacocks to the students. (this is correct if you're talking about what an ornithologist does in general. But if you're reporting what the ornithologist is doing, you have to use the past tense of explain)
4. He is a very timid person and always skeptical.
5. The ads were trying to incite public opinion by the exuberant oratory. (well ads like commercials are not exactly live. Oratory is something that is done publicly and in real time so oratory is incorrect here. Instead of exuberant oratory, maybe 'flashy language' would work.
6 The collegiate national team faces relegation if they lose again.
7. The focal figure of this movie is Mcglegor John, an impersonator who is intensely chauvinistic. (focal figure is too formal for a film review. We just say the main protagonist or the central figure. Also, we don't say that someone has chauvinism. We describe someone as chauvinistic.)
8. She vented that the way she had been treated at work had caused her psychological distress. (Very good!)
I really appreciate your help.
Etsuko
