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Day 6 - 30 Day Creative Writing Challenge Day 6 Think of your favorite food. Try to make it sound as disgusting as possible. Here we go: "What's the point of eating something if you do not cook it? I've heard once that humans beings developed their nervous system because, differing of other species they didn't need to spend too much time searching, hunting, stocking and eating food. Neurons need energy and digestion takes a lot of it. Since humans started to cook their meals, the digestion became much easier and left room for the brain to consume that extra energy. So why, after thousands of years are we still eating raw food? That's something that I can't understand about Japanese food. I've tried a 'sashimi' once and it felt like I was eating a snail, eww! It was cold, wet, viscous, and smell like raw fish!! That alone is already disgusting. I find even fresh fish smelly. Terrible, worse than that is only possible if you should eat it alive fish alive. Here we are, back to the stone age..." Just to clarify, I actually love Japanese food, especially sashimi! Please, I would appreciate a correction.

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Day 6 - 30 Day Creative Writing Challenge

Day 6
Think of your favorite food. Try to make it sound as disgusting as possible.

Here we go:
"What's the point of eating something if you do not cook it?"

I've heard once that humans beings developed their nervous system because, differing of unlike other species, they didn't need to spend too much time searching or hunting*for* food, stocking and or eating it. Neurons need energy, and digestion takes a lot of it. Since humans started to cook their meals, the digestion became much easier and left room for the brain to consume that extra energy. So why, after thousands of years, are we still eating raw food?

That's something that I can't understand about Japanese food. I've tried a 'sashimi' once, and it felt like I was eating a snail, eww! It was cold, wet, viscous, and smelled like raw fish!! That alone is already disgusting. I find even fresh fish smelly. Terrible, worse than that is only possible if you should eat it alive fish when it is still alive. Here we are, back to the stone age..."

Just to clarify, I actually love Japanese food, especially sashimi!


Please, I would appreciate a correction.
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Day 6 - 30 Day Creative Writing Challenge

Day 6
Think of your favorite food. Try to make it sound as disgusting as possible.

Here we go:
"What's the point of eating something if you do not cook it?"

I've heard once that humans beings developed their nervous system because, differing of other species they didn't need to spend too much time searching, hunting, stocking and eating food.
Not too sure what you mean by that highlighted phrase.

Neurons need energy and digestion uses a lot of it them.
"Neurons" is a plural noun, so you need to use the plural pronoun "them" instead of the singular pronoun "it". In English, neurons are something that we use.

Since humans started to cook their meals, the digestion became much easier and left room for the brain to consume that extra energy.
"Digestion' is a universal thing (all living things digest stuff), so no article is needed before the word.

So why, after thousands of years, are we still eating raw food? That's something that I can't understand about Japanese food.

I've tried a 'sashimi' once and it felt like I was eating a snail, eww!
"Sashimi" is plural, so no singular article is needed before the word.

It was cold, wet, viscous, and smelled like raw fish!!
Since you are describing the fish in the past tense, 'smell' needs to be in the past tense, too.

That alone is already disgusting. I find even fresh fish smelly.

Terrible, worse than that is only possible if you should eat it alive fish alive. The only thing that could possibly be worse would be to eat live fish.
I think this was what you were meaning to say, right?

Here we are, back to the stone age..."

Just to clarify, I actually love Japanese food, especially sashimi!


Please, I would appreciate a correction.


Overall, nice work! I hope these corrections and comments were helpful. Let me know if you have other questions (:

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