My favorite Japanese chocolate snack Lumonde
Bourbon Lumonde is long-seller rolled crepe cookies covered with creamy chocolate. The thin layers of cookies are so crispy and have a rich cocoa chocolate fillings. This is the best chocolate snack for an afternoon break with a cup of tea. From many Japanese candy companies, Bourbon is the one I like the most. All snacks and candies from Bourbon are always beyond expectations.
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My favorite Japanese chocolate snack Lumonde
Bourbon Lumonde is long-seller rolled crepe cookies covered with creamy chocolate. The thin layers of cookies are so crispy and have a rich cocoa chocolate fillings. This is the best chocolate snack for an afternoon break with a cup of tea. From many Japanese candy companies, Bourbon is the one I like the most. All snacks and candies from Bourbon are always beyond expectations.long-seller: Probably you mean "top-seller", or perhaps "has been sold for many years". Either way this would probably be better as its own sentence. "Bourbon Lumonde has been a top selling snack for many years. It is rolled crepe cookies covered with creamy chocolate."
cocoa chocolate: This is redundant. You do not need to specify cocoa chocolate, as that is the "normal" kind of chocolate. Possibly you mean "cocoa and chocolate", which are slightly different things, so that would work as well, but I do not believe this is the case.
All snacks and candies: In this sentence you say "All" and "always", but this is also redundant, in this case. "Always" is the better choice to mean "every single candy every time." You could say "All" and "always" if you want to really stress that this is definitely the case every time.
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Hi, Jorge! Thanks for your nice comment! I love chocolates and English♪
I'm eager to improve my English skill.
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This is short paragraph is descriptive and to the point, very well written. Makes me want to learn more about Bourbon Lumonde. If you want someone to practice English, shoot me a message.
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