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Correct my entry please. It's about a movie named wonder Hi. Please correct my entry as much as you can. Thanks. I watched a movie named "wonder" last night and I want to write a little about it. This movie is about a boy named "Auggie" that hides himself from people because his face is not usual. He has a kind of syndrome. So he has been learning all the lessons in home by his great mother and he has never been in a school. But now he wants to go to a school. He is in fifth grade. He has lots of fears because he always hides his face from others by wearing an astronaut's cap when he is outside. But finally he went to a school. I will write the rest of this story in one another entry to prevent it of being so long. Thanks for your correction.

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I watched a movie named "wWonder" last night and I want to write a little about it. 

This movie is about a boy named "Auggie" that who hides himself from people because of his unusual face is not usual. He has a kind of syndrome. So he has been learning all the his lessons in at home by his great mother , being taught by his grandmother(1). and h He has never been in a school.

But now he wants to go to a school. He is in fifth grade. He has lots of fears because(2) Because he has many fears he always hides his face from others by wearing an astronaut's cap helmet when he is outside. But finally he went to a school.

(1) I've seen the movie but I can't remember if he was taught by his grandmother or his mother? You said "his great mother", which makes me think of grandmother. But perhaps you mean something like "his wonderful mother" or "his caring mother".


(2) Your original sentence "He has lots of fears BECAUSE he always hides his face" implies that it is the act of hiding his face which gives him his fear. What you mean so say is "he hides his face because he has fear".

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