The man
My English teacher was an extraordinary man. He was a tall, brown and a really outgoing person. He was special to me not just because I learned a whole bunch of grammatical stuff with him but also, when I was a teenager I was having troubles with my parents and other teachers at school, and he was the only person that I listened at that time. I think it was because of his creative way of building empathy with me. I mean, before giving me any advise he used to tell me something like You know what Juan, I completely understand the way you act because when I was your age I used to act in the exactly the same way". And that kind of statements opened the door to have any sort of conversation.
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The Man
My English teacher was an extraordinary man. He was tall, dark-skinned, and a really outgoing person. He was special to me not just because I learned so much grammar from him, but also because he was the only person that listened to me when I was a teenager and having trouble with my parents and other teachers at school. I also think he was special because of the creative way he expressed empathy with me. Before giving me any advice, he used to tell me something like, "You know what, Juan, I completely understand the way you act because when I was your age I used to act in exactly the same way." Those kinds of statements opened the door for us to have any sort of conversation.Hi Juan. This paragraph is really well-constructed and has a good flow from sentence to sentence. Nice job!! Here is an explanation of the changes I made.
We always capitalize the first letter of substantive/content words (nouns, adjectives, pronouns, adverbs) in titles (in this case, The Man). With skin color, we would normally say "fair skinned," "light skinned," or "dark skinned." The third sentence needs to have a parallel structure -- "not just because..." and "but also because." When we speak, it is okay to stay things like "whole bunch of stuff," but this very informal language should be avoided in writing. Also, "I mean" is just a filler phrase we use when speaking; it should also be avoided in writing. "Advise" is a verb and "advice" is a noun, so "advice is the appropriate choice here. In the last sentence, you might consider changing "any sort of conversation" to something like "important conversations" (though the sentence is correctly written).
Please let me know if you have any questions.
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