Should video websites warn teenagers about dangerous behavior?
Hello, everybody. I wrote a one-paragraph essay. If you have some corrections for me, I will really appreciate.
Teenagers should be warned about dangerous behavior. First, teenagers tend to imitate actions that they see on the internet, for example, bird box challenge was viral and unsafe, some people hurt themselves. Second, some teenagers don’t think about their actions and consequences. They just does dangerous actions for fun, for example, to put aluminum into a microwave.
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Should video websites warn teenagers about dangerous behavior?
Hello everyone. I wrote a one-paragraph essay. I welcome any changes, corrections or suggestions you would like to make to it.Teenagers should be warned about videos containing dangerous behavior before they view them. Teens tend to imitate actions that they see on the internet such as the bird box challenge. Some people hurt themselves attempting this challenge as the video went viral. Also, some teenagers don’t think about the consequences of their actions. They often attempt dangerous stunts just for fun, thinking nothing serious will happen, such as putting aluminum into a microwave.
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Should video websites warn teenagers about dangerous behavior?
Hello, everybody. I wrote a one-paragraph essay. If you have some corrections for me, I will really appreciate.Teenagers should be warned about dangerous behaviors. First, teenagers tend to imitate actions that they see on the internet such as the bird box challenge that went viral and was unsafe, some people hurt themselves. Second, some teenagers don’t think about their actions and the possible consequences. They just do dangerous things for fun. For example, putting aluminum into a microwave.
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Great job. The essay was easy to understand. I just made some stylistic changes and fixed a couple of grammar issues.
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