exercise : job interview (urgent)
I am interested in crop improvement since many years and I organized my studies in order to become a plant breeder. I get a bachelor degree in Biology and I passed the examination for the entry in "Grandes écoles" where I currently study agriculture sciences.
I can really be passionate when I like what I'm doing, I mean that it's important to me to provide good results. Yes, I have flaws, who doesn't have ? I need time to accept criticism but I finally use it to change my way of doing. I don't really neither work in team because I have bad memories of it during my studies. It's also a good point because I already worked with people very different of me and with other ways of doing. I understood that the exchange can be helpfull. I play rugby since 4 years and it also helped me to work in team because each person has a position in the field, I am a "prop" and I have my own functions to permit the team to score a collective try.
I know to work under pressure because I was used to work under pression during my studies. I had a lot of projects and I know how to organize myself. The pression also give adrenaline and it is motivating.
I was an administrative agent for the wheat campaign, I had to received farmers who sold wheat and stock it.
I like to write novels for myself. I wrote a short story for Crous competition, the deadline was in march 15, I'm waiting for the jury's decision. The topic was the revolution, I was really please to write it and I think that the ability can be usefull at work because I should write articles in my carreer.
Thank you very much for reading
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Hi Marion.
Your original text does not contain many grammar mistakes, but a lot of stylistic and phrase errors (so that at times it is not very clear what you meant), so I took the liberty of editing your text in order to convey, what I believe you meant to convey. Please note that in the text below much of my personal written expression style will shine through, meaning it is by no means a guideline, it is - just as stated above - a reformulation of your essay that does away with the previous errors.
I hope it helps
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I have been interested in crop improvement for many years and
I've set up my studies such, that I will become a plant breeder. I am currently
pursuing a bachelor’s degree in biology and agricultural sciences at "Grandes
écoles”, having already passed the entrance examination. I can really be passionate about my
occupation, provided I enjoy it. I admit to being flawed, but so are we all.
Criticism is not something I take well right away, but I do eventually take it
into consideration and change my ways. In the same vein, I do not particularly
enjoy working in a team, due to unpleasant experiences of doing so during my
studies. In the light of this I chose to work together with people of very different
backgrounds and approaches, thus I understood how helpful exchange experiences
can be.
On another note, I have been playing rugby since I was four
years old, which has helped me build a capacity for teamwork, as every match is
a collective effort. I play as a “prop”, which entails having specific
functions on the pitch.
Furthermore, I am no stranger to working under pressure.
Having carried through numerous projects during my studies has taught me the
value of organization and showed me that pressure can also be a great motivator. I would also like to draw attention to my activity as an
administrative employee for the wheat campaign. In doing so my duties were
receiving the farmers who were selling wheat and overseeing the stocking
process.
On yet another note, I enjoy writing novels. In such an
endeavor I was pleased to write a short story for the Crous competition, on the
topic of revolution. The jury’s decision on my essay is still outstanding,
since the deadline was as recently as the 15th of March. I am
mentioning the above, given the important role the ability to write will have in
publishing articles during my career.
Thank you for reading my letter.
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exercise : job interview (urgent)
I have been interested in crop improvement for many years and I organized my studies in order to become a plant breeder. I got a Bachelor's degree in Biology and I passed the examination for the entry to "Grandes Ecoles" where I currently study agricultural sciences.I can really be passionate when I like what I'm doing, I mean that it's important to me to provide good results. Yes, I have flaws, who doesn't? I need time to accept criticism but I finally use it to change my way of doing things. I don't really like working in a team because I have bad memories of it during my studies. It's also a good point because I have worked with people very different from me and with different ways of doing things. I understand that exchange can be helpful. I have played rugby for 4 years and it also helped me to work in a team because each person has a position in the field, I am a "prop" and I have my own functions to fulfill to permit the team to score a collective try.
I know to work under pressure because I was used to working under pressure during my studies. I had a lot of projects and I know how to organize myself. The pressure also gives me adrenaline and it is motivating.
I was an administrative agent for the wheat campaign, I had to receive farmers who sold wheat and stock it.
I like to write novels for myself. I wrote a short story for the Crous competition, the deadline was on March 15, I'm waiting for the jury's decision. My topic was the revolution, I was really pleased to write it and I think that the ability can be useful at work because I have to write articles in my career.
Thank you very much for reading
Some nice work here, it would be worth reviewing the present perfect as well as 'for' and 'since', as these caused some problems for you.
Best wishes
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