Practice for Describing People in English #2
One of my good friends is a Japanese man who studies economics at a university in the US.
He has lived abroad for seven years or so, and that's why he is much more open-minded as compared to other my Japanese friends who haven't left Japan.
Speaking of his physical characteristic, he looks so slim although he eats like a horse. Every girl around him feels jealous of his shape.
However, I think that the glasses he usually wears don't suit him. If I were him, I would put contact lenses in to make me look cooler.
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One of my good friends is a Japanese man who studies economics at a university in the US.
He has lived abroad for seven years or so, and that's why he is much more open-minded as compared to (1) my other my Japanese friends who stayed in haven't left Japan.
Speaking of his physical characteristic (2) By the way, he looks so slim although he eats *like a horse. Every girl around him feels (3) envious jealous of his (4) figure. shape
However, I think that the glasses he usually wears don't suit him. If I were him, I would (5) put on / wear contact lenses in to make (5) myself look cooler.
Hi Yuko,
Just some suggestions for your writing here:
(1) You have a noun phrase "my other Japanese friends" here. The word "my", as a determiner, comes before other pre-modifiers such as "other" and "Japanese" before you introduce the main noun "friends".
(2) Though there is nothing wrong with your introductory phrase (Speaking of his physical characteristic), it sounds formal. Since you are writing informally about your friend, perhaps you can use "By the way" to divert the readers' attention to a side topic.
*This is an interesting simile!
(3) "Envious" might be a more suitable word here – We are "jealous" when we resent the fact that someone has something that we don't. There is an element of dislike for the person because find the situation unfair or feel that someone does not deserve their achievement. On the contrary, "envious" is a yearning for something that someone else has without the negative emotions.
(4) We use "figure" to talk about a person's bodily shape.
(5) We "put on" some trendy clothes, "put on" some makeup or put on some accessories such as earrings and wristbands to jazz up our outfit. You can also "put on" or "wear" your contact lens.
(6) We use reflexive pronouns when the subject and object of a verb are the same. In your case, the subject is you ("I"). The object is referring to you too. Therefore, the word "myself" is needed. Example: I (subject referring to you) made myself (object is referring to you too) a cup of tea.
I hope this helps.
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One of my good friends is a Japanese man who studies economics at a university in the US.
He has lived abroad for seven years or so, and that's why he is much more open-minded as compared to my other Japanese friends who haven't left Japan.
As for (It's a common entry phrase in such cases)his physical characteristics, ([features] also possible) he looks so slim although he eats like a horse (I'm not sure that this english idiom features horse). Every girl around him feels jealous of his shape.
However, I think that the glasses he usually wears don't suit him. If I were him, I would put contact lenses on to make myself look cooler.
I hop this was helpful!😊
He has lived abroad for seven years or so, and that's why he is much more open-minded as compared to my other Japanese friends who haven't left Japan.
As for (It's a common entry phrase in such cases)his physical characteristics, ([features] also possible) he looks so slim although he eats like a horse (I'm not sure that this english idiom features horse). Every girl around him feels jealous of his shape.
However, I think that the glasses he usually wears don't suit him. If I were him, I would put contact lenses on to make myself look cooler.
I hop this was helpful!😊
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