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Today i plan to go home.
In subway,there are many people.
It`s crowded.
I stand a long time.I feel my legs are sore.All the way,i meet some cute children.And other people take the big baggage.
I look around finding an interesting phenomenon that all people pay attention on mobilephone.No one reads book.
Mobilephone can entertain us but it `s little rewarding for us .
In contrast, I am more advocate about reading.
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Read books
Today I plan to go home.In the subway, there are many people.
It`s crowded.
I stand for a long time. I feel my legs are sore. All the way, I meet some cute children.And other people take the big baggage. and other people have big baggage
I look around and find finding an interesting phenomenon that all people pay attention on mobilephone everyone is paying attention to their mobile phones.No one reads books.
Mobile phones can entertain us but it `s little rewarding for us there is little reward in it for us.
In contrast, I am more advocate about in favour of reading.
This is a great piece of writing with a good message. You seem to have had some trouble with prepositions but still managed to paint a great picture of a busy subway ride.
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