IELTS - Writing Task 2 (Please give me feedback to improve my text) TOPIC: Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ It is well known that lately people have been living much longer than in the past, on this basis some argument that people should retire from works much later. Of course the retirement age should be revised according to the life expectancy, but it must also be taken into account that people from lower social class usually live less than the wealthy ones. As many people are living longer nowadays, there are more people retiring from work and they earn the pension for more time. It is obvious that the current rules for retirement are no longer economically sustainable, once soon the number of workers will be less than the retired people. Based on this expectation, the age at which people retire from work should be raised according to the life expectancy. On the other hand, it is important to consider that poor people in general live shorter than the average for several reasons, such as hunger and disease due to the lack of sanitary conditions. Therefore, rising the retirement indiscriminately must affect directly this social group, thus the rules should be more flexible in order to include these people and offer them the needed conditions to survive. For instance, farm workers and any other worker who uses force in work should be retired earlier than the others, once in their later age they no longer have any capacity to keep working. In conclusion, it can be said that the age at which people retire from work hate to raise, otherwise the economy will collapse, because soon it will no longer be sustainable. However the rules for retirement must be flexible enough to include people that will not have conditions to keep working in their later age.