I want to have a cat.
When I was girl, I had a purebred Beijing cat. he was a very cute male cat.His name is Xiao mei,His hair is white and brown. he is lazy and sleeps next to cat food every day.He doesn't like greasy drumsticks, but he likes fresh sea fish.One night, he died on rat poison. 😔I am very sad.
I like cats very much,but my work is very busy. I get off work late every day and have less time to style with the cat. besides, my roommate doesn't like cat. so I don't have a cat now. I want a cat very much.I think I'll have a cat this year because I'm going to change my job.
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I want to have a cat.
When I was a little girl, I had a purebred Beijing cat. he was a very cute male cat.His name was Xiao mei. His had white and brown fur. he was lazy and slept next to cat food every day.He didn't like greasy drumsticks, but he did like fresh sea fish.One night, he died of rat poison. 😔I was very sad.I like cats very much, but my work keeps me very busy. I get off work late every day and have less time to style(not sure what you meant here) with the cat. besides, my roommate doesn't like cats, so I don't have a cat now. I want a cat very much. I think I'll have a cat this year because I'm going to change my job.
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Really good!
Since you were talking about when you were small, you have to put the whole story into the past tense.
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I want to have a cat.
When I was girl, I had a purebred Beijing cat. He was a very cute male cat. His name is Xiao mei. His hair was white and brown. He was lazy and sleeps slept next to cat food every day. He doesn't didn't like greasy drumsticks, but he liked fresh sea fish.One night, he died on from rat poison. 😔I am was very sad.I like cats very much, but my work is I'm very busy with work. I get off work late every day and have less time to style with the don't have much time to take care of a cat. besides, my roommate doesn't like cats. So I don't have a cat now. I want a cat very much. I think I'll have a cat this year because I'm going to change my job.
Eve, very nice essay. I also like cats. I have two.
Two things to pay attention to in your English writing: (1) tenses - you frequently used Present Tense when Past Tense would make more sense. and (2) Punctuation. In English it's important to insert a space after every period/full stop.
I hope you can get a cat soon. If not, come to the US and you can babysit my cats.
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