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Man by nature is a social animal, therefore, he needs a fellow human being to share his empathetic conversations and release his pent-in turmoil, but with the advancement of technology, the real world is changing with the virtual world, interpersonal communication is reduced to superficial sharing and the real friendship is replaced to the virtual friends. People who appear happy and active on social media are actually more deserted and depressed in real life. As a result, the person became lonely in both the real and virtual world and find it hard to express their need for emotional support.
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Man by nature is a social animal; therefore, he needs a fellow human being to share his empathetic conversations and release his pent-in turmoil, but, with the advancement of technology, the real world is changing with the virtual world. Social media has replaced genuine bonding with superficial sharing, and virtual friends have replaced flesh and blood friends. People who appear happy and active on social media are actually alone and depressed in real life. Living in such a shallow and superficial way, the person becomes lonely in both the real and virtual world and finds it hard to express their need for emotional support.1
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Man by nature is a social animal, therefore, he needs a fellow human being to share his empathetic conversations and vent-out his inner turmoil, but with the advancement of technology, the real world is changing with the virtual world. Interpersonal communication is reduced to superficial sharing and the real friendship is replaced with virtual friends. People who appear happy and active on social media are actually more isolated and depressed in real life. As a result, the person becomes lonely in both the real and virtual world and finds it hard to express their need for emotional support.0
it is a great effort but you need to pay more attention while writing ...so to improve it read more and more it will give you an idea about what is wrong ..i can go on to your mistakes but i think it was a good effort
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Man by nature is a social animal, therefore, he needs a fellow human being to share his empathetic conversations and pent-out his inner turmoil, but with the advancement of technology, the real world is changing with the virtual world, interpersonal communication is reduced to superficial sharing and the real friendship is replaced to by the virtual friends. People who appear happy and active on social media are actually more deserted and depressed in real life. As a result, the person became lonely in both the real and virtual world and find it hard to express their his need for emotional support.
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