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Aloha greeting I met a guy who was in Aloha shirt this morning. We talk a little bit. He said he came to Hawaii 30 years ago and he still likes the island. I was happy to hear that. We said "Aloha," after we said "Have a good day" to each other. It was very peaceful moment to me.

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Aloha greeting

I met a guy* who was in Aloha shirt this morning. We talked for a little bit. He said he came to Hawaii 30 years ago and he still likes the island. I was happy to hear that. We said "Aloha," after we said "Have a good day" to each other. It was very peaceful moment to me.


This was very nice. The English literary term is "slice-of-life." You could have gone into much more detail, but as it is, you wrote a nice, intriguing little paragraph.

* Tell us more. "I met a guy in an Aloha shirt this morning at the supermarket" "I met a guy in an Aloha shirt rollerskating down the sidewalk in front of a hot dog stand" "I met a guy in front of my building this morning, he was wearing an Aloha shirt, and nothing else" . . . the Aloha shirt is interesting, but you can give your readers even more color. What made the moment interesting for you.

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Aloha greeting

I met a guy who was in an Aloha shirt this morning. We talk a little bit. He said he came to Hawaii 30 years ago and he still likes the island. I was happy to hear that. We said "Aloha," after we said "Have a good day" to each other. It was a very peaceful moment to me.

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