honeymoon
After the wedding. the newly married, Maria, with her lady of company Ester.
Esther: And how was everything on the honeymoon?
Maria: Excellent.
Esther: Where did they go? he asks as he passes him a glass of water.
Maria: To the Philippines. From there I brought this bag that I gave you. It suits you with those clothes, by the way.
Ester; Thank you. Take this, before I forget here is the bill for your wedding venue. I had it in my old bag by mistake.
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Honeymoon
After the wedding, the newly married, Maria with her lady friend Esther.Esther: And how was (everything on) the honeymoon?
Maria: Excellent.
Esther: Where did you (keeping in mind that Esther is asking about Maria's honeymoon) go? (she asks as she passes her a glass of water) (actions are usually written in brackets or in italics, since they are not part of the speech)
Maria: To the Philippines. I bought the bag that I gave you there. It suits you with those clothes, by the way.
Ester: Thank you. Take this before I forget! Here is the bill for your wedding venue. I put it in my old bag by mistake.
Please note:
She, her, hers = female
He, him, his = male
You = when the person or people (or at least one of those people) are present in the conversation
Jack is talking to Mary.
Jack: So, how are you (= Mary) and Nathan doing? (Mary is present)
Mary: We (Nathan and I) are doing great. Thank you for asking!
Jack is talking to Mary and Nathan.
Jack: How are you today?
Mary: I'm fine, thank you. (Mary is present)
Nathan: Me too. (Nathan is present)
Mary and Nathan: We are both fine!
They = when none of the people you talk about are present in the conversation (Mary, John and Susan are at school)
Jack is talking to Mary.
Jack: Where are Susan, David and Ben (= they)?
Mary: They ( = Susan, David and Ben) are at school. (None of these three are present)
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Honeymoon
After the wedding. the newly married, Maria, with her lady of company, Esther:Esther: And how was everything on the honeymoon?
Maria: Excellent.
Esther: Where did they you go? he , she asks as she passes him her a glass of water.
Maria: To the Philippines. From there I brought this bag that I gave you. That's where I bought the bag I gave you. It suits you with those clothes, by the way.
Esther; Thank you. Take this, before I forget. It's the bill for your wedding venue. I left it in my old bag by mistake when I changed bags yesterday. iI had it in my old bag by mistake.
I hope this is what you were looking for. The main errors are the pronouns. (you, they, him, her). The other phrases I added perhaps are more natural sounding.
Cheers!
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