She didn't use the door
She appeared from time to time in my flat, always at night. I never realized when she got inside. She didn't use the doorbell. I usually met her sitting on the couch watching the TV. At first it was quite scary but over time I got used to her frightening way...
Little by little we became friends. I have to say that she was very friendly and she was always in good mood. We could talk to each other during hours. She was very cultured and knew much about history, specially about things that happened centuries ago. She could descrive some facts from the past as well as if she had lived that time. However she talked only about what she wanted and never answered questions about her.
One time I asked for her origins and descent. I still didn't know if she had family. She told me that it would be much better for me if I didn't know some things. Her look became danger at times but she never stopped to smile at me.
Just as she appeared she disappeared. You could never gues when this would happen. I never gave her a key from the door. I started thinking that she used the window but this tought was not specially reasonable as I lived on the seventh floor...
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She didn't use the door
She appeared from time to time in my flat, always at night. I never realized when she got inside. She didn't use the doorbell. I usually found her sitting on the couch watching the TV. At first it was quite scary but over time I got used to her frightening way...Little by little we became friends. I have to say that she was very friendly and she was always in good mood. We could talk to each other for hours. She was very cultured and knew a lot about history, specially about things that happened centuries ago. She could describe some facts from the past well, as if she had lived that time. However she only talked about what she wanted and never answered questions about her.
One time I asked about her origins and descent. I still didn't know if she had a family. She told me that it would be much better for me if I didn't know some things. Her look became danger at times but she never stopped to smile at me.
Just as she appeared she disappeared. You could never guess when this would happen. I never gave her a key from the door. I started to think that she used the window but this thought was not very reasonable as I lived on the seventh floor...
This is amazing for a non native speaker! Well Done!
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She didn't use the door
She appeared from time to time in my flat, always at night. I never realized when she got inside. She didn't use the doorbell. I usually met her sitting on the couch watching the TV. At first it was quite scary but over time I got used to her frightening way...Little by little we became friends. I have to say that she was very friendly and she was always in good mood. We could talk to each other during hours. She was very cultured and knew much about history, specially about things that happened centuries ago. She could describe some facts from the past as well as if she had lived that time. However she talked only about what she wanted and never answered questions about her.
One time I asked for her origins and descent. I still didn't know if she had family. She told me that it would be much better for me if I didn't know some things. Her look became danger at times but she never stopped to smile at me.
Just as she appeared she disappeared. You could never gues when this would happen. I never gave her a key from the door. I started thinking that she used the window but this tought was not specially reasonable as I lived on the seventh floor...
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She didn't use the door
She appeared from time to time in my flat, always at night. I never noticed when she came in. She didn't ring the doorbell. I usually met her sitting on the couch watching (the) TV. At first it was quite scary but over time I got used to her frightening ways...Little by little we became friends. I have to say that she was very friendly and she was always in a good mood. We could talk to each other for hours. She was very cultured and knew much about history, especially about things that happened centuries ago. She could describe some facts from the past as well as if she had lived during that time. However she talked only about what she wanted and never answered questions about herself.
One time I asked about her origins and descent. I still didn't know if she had any family. She told me that it would be much better for me if I didn't know some things. Her look became dangerous (scary)at times but she never stopped smiling at me.
Just as she appeared, she disappeared. You could never guess when this would happen. I never gave her a key to the door. I started thinking that she used the window but this thought was not especially reasonable as I lived on the seventh floor...
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Fascinating, Pedro, and very well written. Is this original?
Most of my corrections are minor, either spelling errors or due to that insidious nightmare we call prepositions.
One note: I left "descent," because it isn't exactly wrong, but neither does it sound natural to me. I think "ancestry" is probably the better word.
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im very confused what is this
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