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About my favorite movie My favorite movie is Billy Elliot. When Billy was a little, his father got him taken a boxing class. However, he wasn't good at boxing and dislike it. That class was held in a school gym and it was separated two parts. One was boxing class and the other was ballet class. He really obsessed ballet. He finally quit boxing and then participated in that ballet class secretly. His father presumed he still doing boxing. However, his father found his ballet shoes. He was freaked out so he had Billy quit ballet. However, Billy was hooked on it so he and his teacher decided to continue practicing. Thanks to his effort and passion, his ballet skill really improved so his teacher decided to take him to the famous ballet school located in London. However, it cost a lot to get there and he had to pay money for himself. His family was really poor so they couldn't afford to pay that fare. One day, Billy and his friend were in the gym. He showed him his ballet skill there. His father happened to drop by that gym and see his ballet for the first time. He was touched his excellent ballet skill and he decided to make money for him. He was a miner but he was on a strike at that time. He quit the strike union and compromised his company's offer to make money. His brother was also a member of that union but he also helped him. He could go to London and take an entrance exam thanks to their effort. He could pass the exam and practice ballet there. In 1998, his father, his brother, and his best friend settled in the seat at the theater to watch Swan Lake.

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About my favorite movie

My favorite movie is Billy Elliot. When Billy was a little, his father got him taken took him to a boxing class. However, he wasn't good at boxing and disliked it. That class was held in a school gym, which and it was separated into two parts. One was boxing class and the other was ballet class. Billy really immediately became obsessed with ballet. He finally quit boxing and then participated in that ballet class secretly. His father presumed he was still doing boxing. However, eventually his father found his ballet shoes. He was freaked out so he had  and forced Billy to quit ballet. However, Billy was hooked on it so he and his teacher decided to continue practicing. Thanks to his effort and passion, his ballet skill really improved, so his teacher decided to take him to the famous ballet school located in London. However, it would cost a lot to get there and he had would have to pay the money for himself. His family was really poor so they couldn't afford to pay that the fare. One day, Billy and his friend were in the gym. He showed his friend his ballet skill there. Billy's father happened to drop by that gym and see his ballet for the first time. He was touched moved by his excellent ballet skill and he decided to make earn extra money for his son's passion. Billy's father was a miner but he was on a strike at that time. He quit the strike union and compromised his company's offer to make money. His brother was also a member of that union but he also helped him. Billy could go to London and take an entrance exam thanks to their effort. He could passed the exam and practiced ballet there. In 1998, Billy's father, his brother, and his best friend settled in their seats at the theater to watch Billy perform in Swan Lake.


Your description of this movie was great. I have seen the film many times (it really inspired me as I danced ballet all throughout my childhood and adolescence) and although it has been a long while since I last saw it, your description brought back the scenes clearly. One thing to watch out for when you are writing in English is to make sure that your reader knows who the subject of the sentence is. Sometimes, and especially since you are only talking about male characters here, "he" gets confusing, so it is good to remind us by throwing an extra "Billy" in just to make us remember whom you're talking about. Otherwise, great work on your paragraph!


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