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Working as a children`s doctor in Norway I am a paediatrician. I have been working and living in Norway for 12 years. I work at the children’s department of the Førde general hospital. It has 2500 employees and serves as a central hospital for the county Sogn og Fjordane. When I work the normal shift on the ward, I am in charge of the children from zero to 1 years of age, including premature babies. At the outpatient department, I handle patients of every age between zero and 16 or 18 years. I handle patients who suffer from asthma, allergies, cancer, chronic fatigue syndrome, developmental dysplasia of the hips, cardiac problems, hypertension, kidney diseases and more. My job involves working 24-hour shifts on the ward. Then I am responsible for all patients between zero and 16 years of age. I deal with patients who suffer from infections (pneumonia, urinary tract infection, bronchiolitis), diabetes, premature babies, seizures and more.

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Working as a children`s doctor in Norway

I am a paediatrician. I have been working and living in Norway for 12 years.
I work at the children’s department of the Førde general hospital. It has 2500 employees and serves as a central hospital for the county Sogn og Fjordane.
When I work the normal shift on the ward, I am in charge of the children from zero to 1 years of age, including premature babies.
At the outpatient department, I handle patients of every age between zero and 16 or 18 years.
I handle patients who suffer from asthma, allergies, cancer, chronic fatigue syndrome, developmental dysplasia of the hips, cardiac problems, hypertension, kidney diseases and more.

My job involves working 24-hour shifts on the ward. Then I am responsible for all patients between zero and 16 years of age. I deal with patients who suffer from infections (pneumonia, urinary tract infection, bronchiolitis), diabetes, premature babies, seizures and more.

[I'm hard pushed to see anything wrong with this passage, Annette! Perhaps the only suggestion I'd make (and it's not a very strong one) is that it might sound 'better' to say "...from birth to 1 years" rather than using "zero years", but that is probably just a matter of personal taste'


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Do not mix number words (zero) and digital numbers (18,). It doesn't matter which you use, but be consistant; weirdly birth to 16 is acceptable. General Hosptial should also begin with capital letters if they are part of the name. Othewise excellent.

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