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hello, guys. this is a issue on whether governments should interfere with people's lifestyle. Question: Some people think it is the responsibility for government to ensure that people have healthy lifestyles. Others think people should have a free for their own lifestyles decisions. The issue whether government should hold responsibility for people’s healthy lifestyles has sparked off an intense debate. As far as I’m concerned, I personally believe that it is of paramount significant for government to make sure people live a healthy lifestyle. Some people hold that the government plays an important role in regulating citizens, so it should ensure that citizens live in a healthy condition. To begin with, it is widely accepted that that the government serves as the servants of people, which means it should take citizens’ life into consideration. As we all know, the first one is that the government should make sure people live healthily. Only in this way, people would have more energy to pursue their studies and careers. Furthermore, the cost of unhealthy lifestyle is enormous so that this kind of lifestyle may lead to a waste of national funding that should have originally been utilized in more important places. Whereas, others tend to believe that citizens should have free right to choose their own lifestyles. First and foremost, everyone has his or her free will, which means they could select what to do regardless of other people’s thoughts. People should have the right to choose what life they would like to live no matter whether it is good or not. Moreover, the definition of healthy lifestyle is not clear, which causes a difficulty for government in interfering with the lifestyle of people. To conclude, although people do have the free right to make their own lifestyle decisions, I’m personally inclined to support that government should take participate in regulating the lifestyle of people.

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Hello, guys. this is an issue of whether governments should interfere with people's lifestyle.

Question: Some people think it is the responsibility for government to ensure that people have healthy lifestyles. Others think people should have a free choice for their own lifestyles decisions.

The issue whether government should hold responsibility for people’s healthy lifestyles has sparked off an intense debate. As far as I’m concerned, I personally believe that it is of paramount significance for government to make sure people live a healthy lifestyle.

Some people hold that the government plays an important role in regulating citizens, so it should ensure that citizens live in a healthy condition. To begin with, it is widely accepted that that the government serves as the servant of people, which means it should take citizens’ lives into consideration. As we all know, the first one is that the government should make sure people live healthily. Only in this way would people have more energy to pursue their studies and careers. Furthermore, the cost of unhealthy lifestyles is enormous so that this kind of lifestyle may lead to a waste of national funding that should have originally been utilized in more important places.

Whereas, others tend to believe that citizens should have the right to choose their own lifestyles. First and foremost, everyone has his or her free will, which means they could select what to do regardless of other people’s thoughts. People should have the right to choose what life they would like to live, no matter whether it is good or not. Moreover, the definition of healthy lifestyle is not clear, which causes a difficulty for government in interfering with the lifestyles of people.

To conclude, although people do have the right and freedom to make their own lifestyle decisions, I’m personally inclined to support the view that government should take participate in regulating the lifestyles of its people.


These are small suggestions. When to use an article "the" or "a" or "an" can be tricky.  Sometimes choices over plural for terms like "life" and "lifestyle" when relating to lots of people can also be problematic. I'm not sure about the phrase "free right". There is no grammatical problem,  but I wonder whether this is better considered as a right or a freedom ...?

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