A charity event to remember
So, why did i decide to organize music concert in my home town? Well, the reason was that our local children's hospital needed to raise money or it would be close. However I didn't realise how big a challenge it would be.
It was a hot spring in 2016, I was in a high school. I had my own music band. We decided to organize this charity concert right after we heard about hospital's problem. It was a real challenge for such a shy person like me to cooperate with such a big amount of people in order to get all things prepared. We asked another music bands to join us so our public become bigger.
In the end, our concert had a great success. It was the most amazing experience I have ever had. We raised even more money than we had too!
After this I realized that peole should do more charity events. Would I be keen to help hospital next time if it's needed? Of course, i suppose I'll try to organize concert twice bigger than it was at the first time!
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Alina this is very well done! Kudos both for writing clearly, and for organizing the event. A couple of corrections below. I think that музыкальная группа could be translated either "musical group" or "band", but a native speaker wouldn't say "musical band". A native might say, for example, rock group or rock band, or hip hop group or hip hop band. рок-группа, хип-хоп группа. For a different kind of music you could say "musical ensemble -- which is just like in Russian "музыкальный ансамбль"-- but ensemble is more for classical music, and band or group for popular music.
Question-- is this phrase correct in Russian: "Я решил организовать концерт чтобы помогать нашей местной детской больницы? "
Best,
Val
A charity event to remember
It was a hot spring in 2016, I was in a high school. I had my own music " I had my own band= musical band) band. We decided to organize this charity concert right after we heard about hospital's problem. It was a real challenge for such a shy person like me to cooperate with such a big amount (better to say: with such a large number) of people in order to get all things everything prepared. We asked another other music bands to join us so our public would become bigger.
In the end, (better to say either "Ultimately" or "As it turned out" our concert had was a great success . It was the most amazing experience I have ever had. We raised even more money than we had too!
After this I realized that peole should do more charity events. Would I be keen to help the hospital next time if it's needed? Of course, i suppose I'll try to organize a concert twice bigger than it was at the first time!
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