My translation of a friend's story
Hello. My friend asked me to help her translate the school composition about what happened to her when she was a child.
I would be grateful if you give it a look and tell if there are mistakes... any remarks are appreciated =)
This story took place in 2011. I visited Turkey for the first time in my life then. We, that is, my grandmother, my mother and I, spent a lot of time planning this trip. The crucial thing was to find a big hotel. For me personally, there was no difference at all, but my grandmother wanted to walk around a big one, so she could feel like the Queen of the Palace. This all sounded funny untill I got lost in that hotel.
One day, when we were walking in a park, my mom asked me to bring her something that was in our room. This was the first time I had to go there alone. I decided to take a shortcut and went down the stairs which I hadn't used before. Somehow, I ended up in a different hotel! There, I saw a lot of strangers walking around, speaking English to each other... My mind just went blank at that moment and I forgot how to get back. I tried to make some exploration of what surrounded me to find my bearings, but in the end I found myself completely lost. My palms got sweaty. There were too many foreign people and too many unfamiliar stairs around me. I was scared that I wouldn't find my mom. I couldn't think of anything better to do than crying. It did not help me, so I pulled myself together and picked random stairs to walk up. Luckily, it led me to my mother and my granny. I hugged them and stayed like that, crying, for a long time. They, though, couldn't understand the whole range of feelings I had recently lived through. In fact, they even told me off for not bringing what they asked me to bring. But I didn't care - I was happy to find my family. Still in Turkey, I hadn't been letting go of mother's hand after that little accident.
Now that I'm old enough, I don't do that, of course, but I still get terrified by just a thought of losing them.
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My translation of a friend's story
Hello. My friend asked me to help her translate the school composition about what happened to her when she was a child.I would be grateful if you give it a look and tell if there are mistakes... any remarks are appreciated =)
This story took place in 2011, when I visited Turkey for the first time in my life then. We, that is, my grandmother, my mother and I, spent a lot of time planning this trip. The crucial thing was to find a big hotel. For me personally, it made no difference at all where we stayed, but my grandmother wanted to walk around a big one so she could feel like the Queen of the Palace. This all sounded funny until I got lost in that hotel.
One day, when we were walking around this park, my mom asked me to bring her something that was in our room. This was the first time I had to go there alone. I decided to take a shortcut and went down some stairs that I hadn't used before. Somehow I ended up in a different hotel! There, I saw a lot of strangers walking around, speaking English to each other... My mind just went blank at that moment and I forgot how to get back. I tried exploring my surroundings in order to find my bearings, but in the end, I found myself completely lost. My palms got sweaty. There were too many foreign people and too many unfamiliar stairs around me. I was scared that I wouldn't find my mom. I couldn't think of anything better to do than cry. It did not help me, so I pulled myself together and picked some random stairs to walk up. Luckily, they led me to my mother and my grandmother. I hugged them and stayed like that, crying, for a long time. They, though, couldn't understand the whole range of feelings I had recently experienced, though. In fact, they even told me off for not bringing what they asked me to bring. But I didn't care - I was happy to find my family. After that little accident, , I didn't let go of mother's hand the whole time we were in Turkey after that little accident.
Now that I'm older, I don't do that, of course, but I still get terrified by just the thought of losing them.
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I don't see any mistakes! The only thing is that "Palace" shouldn't be capitalized. Other than that, great job!
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