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Next Trip I talked with my friends to decide where to go at the next trip. There were too much choices to decide so we used raffles. As a result of raffling, we decided to go to Osaka and Kyoto. I've been there both but traveling with my friends are absolutely crazy! I'm really looking forward to traveling.

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Next Trip

I talked (1) discussed with my friends about to decide where to go for our at the next trip. There were too (2) many  much choices to decide so we (3) drew lots. used raffles. As a result of raffling, After drawing lots, we decided to go to Osaka and Kyoto. I've been to both places there both but traveling with my friends are  (4) is absolutely (5) cool crazy!
I'm really looking forward to traveling.

Hi Daiki, 

Just some suggestions for your writing: 

(1) There is nothing ungrammatical about your use of "talked to"; however, I presume that you were brainstorming with your friends, exchanging ideas before coming to a decision. If this is the case, you can use "discuss about" something. We use "talk to" someone when the situation is more formal, and there is a hierarchical difference. (e.g. The principal talked to the pupil regarding his misbehaviour. / I talked to my manager this morning about my work review.)

(2) Both "much" and "many" are quantifiers. "Much" is used to quantify uncountable nouns (e.g. too much sugar in my coffee) while "many" is used to quantify countable nouns (e.g. too many travel plans to choose from). "Choices" is a countable noun in your context. 

(3) I am not sure if you really used a "raffle". It is an event where numbered tickets are sold to a large group of people first. Then, these people gather to watch numbers being drawn randomly. The person holding on to the same numbered ticket as the number drawn is a winner of a prize. Many of these prizes are sponsored by individuals or companies. In order for a raffle to be successful and exciting, a large number of people have to participate and buy tickets. 

Therefore, I took the liberty to use "draw lots" for you instead. When we "draw lots", we decide on something by randomly choosing a slip of paper (out of many slips of paper). Each choice is written on a slip of paper. The slip of paper chosen will determine the final choice of the group. 

Reference URL: https://idioms.thefreedictionary.com/draw+lots

(4) Subject-verb agreement: What is/are absolutely crazy? (i) Are the friends absolutely crazy? (ii) Or is the travelling with your friends absolutely crazy? (ii) is correct -- the experience of travelling with your friends is crazy. This noun phrase is describing ONE thing that you do (although you do it with MORE THAN ONE friend). Therefore, a singular verb (is) is required. 

(5) You can be "crazy about" something when you are extremely enthusiastic about it. However, in my opinion, your use of "crazy" may give the impression that you consider it disapprovingly as foolish or unwise. 

Example: 

I've been to both places but I'm absolutely crazy about traveling with my friends! (The meaning of "crazy" here is unambiguous.)

I've been to both places but travelling with my friends is absolutely crazy! (compare it with this sentence: I've committed many petty crimes but the thought of murder is absolutely crazy!)

Therefore, I have substituted "crazy" with another informal word "cool" to express your meaning.

I hope this helps. 

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I discussed with my friends to decide where to go on our next trip. There were many choices so we decided to raffle. As a result of raffling, we ended up deciding to go to Osaka and Kyoto. I had already been there in both cities, but traveling with my friends was absolutely crazy! I'm really looking forward to traveling.

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