'economic progress' essay Part I
It should be discussed separately. I will elaborate my views on the topic as follow: economic progress is the most important goal for developing countries based on my experiences. However, live condition, fairness of society, education and healthcare are equally important for a country when she becomes a developed country as time goes on. This is a law of history evolution.
For a developing country, the ultimate goal for her is achieving industrialization and modernization, therefor, people will live a happy life in material, poetry and famine will be eliminated in a forseeable time. Order will be established in society due to fully employment. Education will be attach importance to, healthcare will be improved. Once the economic progress began and continued.
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Hi! I've just made a few corrections. There are still some mistakes.
Economic progress is the most important goal for developing countries based on my experiences in my opinion. However, live living conditions, fairness of having a fair society, education and healthcare are equally important for a country when she becomes a developed country as time goes on. This is a law of history evolution has been shown to be true many times in the past.
For a developing country, the ultimate goal for her is achieving industrialization and modernization, therefor, in order for people will tolive a happy life in material, poetry and famine will be eliminated in a forseeable time in the future. Order will be established in society due to fully employment. Education Greater importance will be attached to education importance to, and healthcare will be improved. Once the economic progress began and continued.
I'm not sure what you meant by 'poetry'. Maybe try something like this: ...in order for people to live their lives full of not just material wealth but also happiness.
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'economic progress' essay Part I
It should be discussed separately. I will elaborate my views which are based on my experiences, on the topic as follows: economic progress is the most important goal for developing countries. based on my experiences. However, living conditions, fairness of society, education and healthcare are equally important. for a country They are equally important for a country when a country she it becomes a developed country later on. This is the law of history evolution.For a developing country, the ultimate goal for her is to achieveeachieving industrialisation and modernisation. Therefore, people who presently experience poverty and famine will eventually see these things eliminated. in the forseeable time. Order will be established in society due to fullly employment. Society will attach more importance to education will become much more attach importance to and as a result, healthcare will also improve. which will also be improved. Once the economic progress has begun, it will continues.
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'Economic Progress' essay Part I
It Two areas* should be discussed separately. I will elaborate my views on the topic as follows: economic progress is the most important goal for developing countries based on my experiences. However, living condition, fairness of society justice, education, and healthcare are equally important for a country when she*** as it becomes a developed country as time goes on. This is a law of historical evolution.For a developing country, the ultimate goal for her is achieving industrialization and modernization, therefore, in order for people will to live a happy life in material, and that poverty and famine will can be eliminated in a foreseeable time. Order will can be established in society due to fully employment by reducing unemployment. Education will can be attach importance to, healthcare will can be improved. Once the economic progress began and continued begins it will be able to continue.
* "Two areas" = two different sub-topics or issues.
** "Fairness of society" is slightly unnatural. "Justice" means that all people are treated fairly.
(after "education" I added a comma. This comma has a funny name: the "Oxford Comma." It is used to clarify that items in a list are separate. In other words, "education" and "healthcare" are two different things on the list, and are not the same. There's a funny grammar joke about Panda bears. But I'll tell you about it elsewhere).
*** Sometimes it's okay to refer to a country as "she." But here, I think it is not natural.
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