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Could you check my grammar, plz? That is why I tried to improve the quality of the translation for you. I wasn't sure whether should I share this ini file with you or not, because it felt like it's not my place to say something about your game and you may have some experts working for you. Plus, I initially translated it just for me and some of my Korean friends who are also patrons of this game as well. I hesitated for some time because I was worried imagining some bad situations like "if they have a translator it could hurt their feelings." Still, I decided to send this email as support from a fan of your game :) These are some examples of the improvement that I made... I didn't list everything, but I tried to write down some of the corrections that I made. Example 1. "gold ingot" / itemName24 - original translation : 괴금 - mistyped, non-existing word Example 2. "inspecting mirrors is a job i*could easily see myself doing" / dialogueEngineer6 - original translation: "거울을 확인하는 일은 나 자신이 무엇을 하고 있는지 쉽게 볼 수 있는 일이야." -> means " looking at the mirror is an easy way to see what I'm doing right now (or what my gesture I'm posing)" - I thought the meaning of the translation is a little different from what the idiom means (at least in my opinion :) Example 3. / "have one of each gem*in your inventory" / featDesc3 - original translation: "가방에 보석을 종류별로 하나씩 가지고 있는다" - The verb's tense was incorrectly used. Example 4. " I need to ask you for*a very small donation..." / dialogueFairyQueen2 - original translation: "네게 아주 소정의 후원을 청하고자 한다…" - the wording of this sentence is very awkward and doesn't make sense... Example 5. "itemName186~194", "statDesc0~3", etc. - I'm not too sure whether there was a technical reason for it or not, but I found some incomplete sections, so I translated them. Again, I just wanted to share this with you as a support and did not mean to hurt anyone's feeling and you don't have use my suggestions! I hope one day you can upgrade the language support function so that it won't take away from the pleasant gaming experience. ------------------------------------------ I wanted to write in a polite and cautious manner and do not want to offend or hurt anyone's feeling. Plus, I'm worried about my grammar as always. Could you help me, please?

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Could you check my grammar, plz?

I wasn't sure whether I should share this .ini file with you or not, because it felt like it's not my place to make changes to your game and you may have localization experts working for you. I initially translated this just for myself and some of my Korean friends who also play your game. I hesitated for some time because I was worried that if you had a translator they might feel insulted. Still, I decided to send this email as support from a fan of your game :)

Below are some examples of the improvement that I made... I didn't list everything, but I tried to explain the reasoning behind some of the corrections that I made.

Example 1. "gold ingot" / itemName24
- original translation : 괴금
- mistyped, non-existing word

Example 2. "inspecting mirrors is a job i*could easily see myself doing" / dialogueEngineer6
- original translation: "거울을 확인하는 일은 나 자신이 무엇을 하고 있는지 쉽게 볼 수 있는 일이야."
-> means " looking at the mirror is an easy way to see what I'm doing right now (or what my gesture I'm making)"
- I thought the meaning of the translation is a little bit different.


Example 3. / "have one of each gem*in your inventory" / featDesc3
- original translation: "가방에 보석을 종류별로 하나씩 가지고 있는다"
- The verb tense is incorrect.

Example 4. " I need to ask you for*a very small donation..." / dialogueFairyQueen2
- original translation: "네게 아주 소정의 후원을 청하고자 한다…"
- the wording of this sentence is very awkward and doesn't make sense...

Example 5. "itemName186~194", "statDesc0~3", etc.
- I'm not too sure whether there was a technical reason for it or not, but I found some incomplete sections, so I translated them.


Again, I just wanted to share this with you as a support and did not mean to hurt anyone's feeling and you don't have use my suggestions! (I hope one day you can upgrade the language support function so that it won't take away from the pleasant gaming experience. - I would remove this sentence)


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I wanted to write this email in a polite and respectful manner and do not want to offend or hurt anyone's feeling. Plus, I'm worried about my grammar as always. Could you help me, please?


This email seems fine. There is nothing to find offense about in this email except possibly the last sentence which I highlighted in red.  I just fixed some of the small grammatical mistakes and made the email flow better. If you want to know the reasoning behind the changes I made or have any other questions just let me know.

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