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Unfortunately, I don't have an important person in my life, otherwise, I think that everyone who we meet during our life has an influence on us. The influence could be big or small but it is.
In life, almost everyone the biggest importance have parents and family. The parents always with us, we spent plenty of time together. The family teach us to speak and walk, help us with advice, it makes us a personality.
However, the family lose clout when we grow. At the moment when we get to a society, lots of different factors begin to affect us, such as TV, media, friends, books etc. In the during our life, we always have a somebody who influences on us, and it's our decision get this influence or not.
For that reason, I consider that we shouldn't look for the most important person in our life. Everything is important and effect on our life continuously.
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Hi. Can you give me any advice?
Hi. Can you give me any advice on how I can improve this text?
Unfortunately, I don't have an important person in my life. Otherwise (Nevertheless), I think that everyone who we meet during our life has an influence on us. The influence could can be big or small but it is exists.
For almost everyone, parents and family have the biggest importance in life. The Parents are always with us, and we spent plenty of time together. The ("Our family" or just "Family) family teaches us to speak and walk, helps us with advice, and it makes gives us a our personality.
However, the family loses clout when as we grow. At the moment when we get to a enter society, lots of different factors begin to affect us, such as TV, media, friends, books etc. In the During our life, we always have a somebody who influences on us, and it's our decision get to accept/receive this influence or not.
For that reason, I consider think/believe/argue that we shouldn't look for the most important person in our life. Everything is important and affects on our life continuously.
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Hi. Can you give me any advice on how I can improve this text?
Unfortunately, I don't have an important person in my life, otherwise, I think that everyone who we meet during our life has an influence on us. The influence could be big or small.
In life, almost everyone can influence you however the biggest importance would have to be parents and family. The parents are always with us, we send our whole lifes together. family teach us to speak and walk, help us with advice, it helps makes us a personality.
However, the family drifts when we grow up. At the moment when we are introduced to society, lots of different factors begin to affect us, such as TV, media, friends, books etc. During our life, we always have a somebody who influences us, and it's our decision to let this influence us or not.
For that reason, I beleive that we shouldn't go constantly looking for the most important person in our life. I believe that everything is important and effect our life continuously.
Unfortunately, I don't have an important person in my life, otherwise, I think that everyone who we meet during our life has an influence on us. The influence could be big or small.
In life, almost everyone can influence you however the biggest importance would have to be parents and family. The parents are always with us, we send our whole lifes together. family teach us to speak and walk, help us with advice, it helps makes us a personality.
However, the family drifts when we grow up. At the moment when we are introduced to society, lots of different factors begin to affect us, such as TV, media, friends, books etc. During our life, we always have a somebody who influences us, and it's our decision to let this influence us or not.
For that reason, I beleive that we shouldn't go constantly looking for the most important person in our life. I believe that everything is important and effect our life continuously.
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I did not change to much just moved some words around and added a couple. over all it was good just need a little touch up. keep up the good work.
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