(Part Two)

Hi Liu, 

Here are some suggestions for your writing: 

(1) In Mandarin, we use the character "人" (people) behind the name of the country to describe the citizens of a country (e.g. 中国人，日本人). In English, we do not do that. For example, we do not say "Japanese people", "Chinese people" or "French people". Instead, we use the definite article "the" with "Chinese" as an adjective to describe things related to China such as its language, culture and people. 

(2) Some time expressions are composed of fixed words. An example would be "in the past", not "in past". Other examples include: "in the end", "at the beginning", "at dawn". 

(3) I have used a conjunction of reason (i.e. because) since "we were very poor then" is the reason for "hardly ever travelled". 

(4) Since you are referring to the past, we use "could" to express an ability in the past.

(5) I have used a conjunction of contrast (i.e though) since "I could hardly travel far away" is in contrast to "I really wanted to see..."

(6) Subject-verb agreement: You are referring to many Chinese. There, you use "lives" as a plural noun which is paired with a plural verb (i.e. are).

(7) The name of the country you have visited is "Japan"; "Japanese" refers to someone who happens to be a citizen of Japan (noun), the national language of Japan (noun) or things related to Japan such as its language, culture and people (adjective). 

(8) I have used "where" as a relative pronoun here since you are providing more information about Japan. 

(9) Here, we use the past perfect tense (i.e. had never seen) because you did not see those things before your trip to Japan. However, you have seen those things after your trip. If you use the present perfect tense (e.g. have never seen), it implies that you did not see those things in the past, and now, you still have not seen them. *The present perfect tense is used for a state of being that existed in the past and still exists.

(10) There is no necessity for the word "back". This is because "home" can also be an adverb to indicate where you are going (go (verb) home (adverb)). 

Reference URL: https://www.dictionary.com/browse/home (Look at definition #16). 

I hope this helps. 

(Part One)

The Chinese (1) people hardly ever travelled go aboard (2) in the past because (3) we were very poor then.

Hi Liu Chang Geng,

Great journal entry! :) Traveling abroad is very interesting and helps us know more about the world.

I've added a few corrections for you below (remember to use the past tense -- went, was, didn't -- when talking about the past). Hope this helps!