Writing An Essay No.6
Hello. I have started to study for the English exam, which is scheduled for this June.
I would appreciate if someone could correct my essay.
Today's title is “ Is Enough Being Done to
Deal with the Shortage of Doctors in Japan? “
I have to use two words from the following list:
1.School
2.Robots
3.number
4.cost
I don't think there is being done to cope with the shortage of doctors in Japan. I have two reasons to support my opinion.
First of all, the population of the elderly people has been increasing these days. However, the number of doctors do not catch up with. For instance, there would be enormous elderly patients at the hospital day and night every day. The doctors do not have time to take a rest or have meals.
Second of all, many robots industries have developed different kinds of AI robots so far. There are AI robots which can serve meals or even take an order at a cafe in Japan. Although, they might examine patients at the hospital day and night in the future, it will still cost highly.
For those reasons, I believe that there is not enough being done to handle with the shortage of doctors in Japan.
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Hello. I have started to study for the English exam, which is scheduled for this June. I would appreciate if someone could correct my essay. Today's title is “ Is Enough Being Done to Deal with the Shortage of Doctors in Japan? “ I have to use two words from the following list: 1.School 2.Robots 3.number 4.cost, I don't think there is enough being done to cope with the shortage of doctors in Japan. I have two reasons to support my opinion. First of all, the population of the elderly people has been increasing. However, the number of doctors can not keep up with the number of patients. For instance, there would be a large amount of elderly patients at the hospital all day and night. The doctors do not have time to take a brake or have a meal. Second of all, The robotics industry has been developing different kinds of robots like (AI) or Artificial Intelligent Robots . There are AI robots which can serve meals or even take an order at a cafe in Japan. Although AI robots might examine patients at the hospital in the future, it will still have a high cost. This is the reason I believe that there is not enough being done to handle the doctor shortage in Japan.
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