Writing An Essay
Hello. I have started to study for the English exam which will be in June this year.
I really appreciate if someone corrects my essay.
Today's title is“Volunteer work should be mandatory for students“
I have to use two words from as follows four words:
1. Private time
2. Community building
3. Self-improvement
4. Education
I need to organize essay with three contents:introduction, main body, and conclusion within 120words to 150words.
I agree that volunteer work should be mandatory for students. I have two reasons to support my opinion.
First of all, it is a good opportunity for students to attend volunteer work. I have an experience to take part in a cleaning day when I was an elementary student. There is much garbage such as cans, plastic bottles and cigarettes here and there. At that time, I was confused why people throw away these garbage everywhere even if there are garbage cans on the streets.Since then, I tell people to throw them away to the garbage cans. This experience made me self-improvement.
Second of all, Most of elderly people live alone nowadays.
I also had an experience visiting them.
We just talked about daily life not as special events. They seemed satisfied after a few minutes talk.
According to the reasons stated above, These volunteer work are good education and should be mandatory for students.
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Writing An Essay
Hello. I have started to study for the English exam, which is scheduled for will be in this June.I would really appreciate if someone could corrects my essay.
Today's title is“Volunteer Work Should be Mandatory for Students“
I have to use two words from the as following list four words:
1. Private time
2. Community building
3. Self-improvement
4. Education
I need to organize my essay along a specific structure with three contents: an introduction, a main body paragraph, and a conclusion between 120 words to and 150 words.
I agree that v Volunteer work should be mandatory for students. I have two reasons to support my opinion.
Firstly, of all, volunteer work is a good opportunity for students to attend volunteer work. They could spend their private time for on community building. I participated in a cleaning day when I was an elementary school student. In our town, the day is held on the first Sunday of every month.There is lots of garbage, such as cans, plastic bottles and cigarettes scattered around the town. At that time, I was confused why people throw this garbage away everywhere. Don't they have a trash can at home? Since then, I make an effort to pick up garbage, or to tell people to dispose of their trash into the garbage cans. This experience made me self-improve ment.
Second of all, the population of elderly people is getting increasing, these days and most of them live alone nowadays. I have visited them. We just talked about daily life, nothing special. They seemed satisfied after a few minutes of talking. I also felt some sense of achievement.
For the reasons stated above, I believe that volunteer work should be mandatory for students.
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