IELTS Task 1
The survey gives the information of the opinion about the city sports club from club's members.
Overall, most members were satisfied at the city sports club, especially in aspect of club facilities. Female and Male members were accounted almost equal percentage (around 64%) in this part. As for opening hours, there were 72% of female members were very satisfied with, whereas male members were relatively ow, only 44% of them. Besides this, 37% of men conveyed they were not satisfied with the time they could access the gym. The part which needs to be improved urgently for female members was the range of activities. 30% of them were not satisfied and the figure was 10 times more than the figure of opening hours which women was not satisfied with.
In conclusion, extending the opening hours and taking place more activities for women ma attract more customers and solve the problems.
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IELTS Task 1
The this survey gives the information about the club members's of the opinion about the city sports club from club's members.Overall, most members were satisfied with at the city sports club, especially with respect to in aspect of club facilities. Female and Mmale members were accounted answered "very satisfied" at an almost equal percentage (around 64%) in this part. As for opening hours, there were 72% of female members who were very satisfied with, whereas male members were relatively low less satisfied, with only 44% responding "very satisfied" of them. Besides this, 37% of men conveyed they were not satisfied with the time they could access the gym. The part which needs to be improved urgently for female members was the range of activities. 30% of them were not satisfied, and the figure was which is 10 times more than the percent of women not satisfied with opening hours the figure of opening hours which women was not satisfied with.
In conclusion, extending the opening hours and taking place adding more activities for women may attract more customers and solve the problems.
Good job with the analysis. I think word choice is something to pay attention to, a few of the words you picked were not quite right for the situation you were trying to describe, but that will get easier with practice.
Try not to end a sentence with "with". It usually means your word order could be improved, or you don't have a complete sentence.
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