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Help me to check this pleas! As result of a highly competitive globalized world, to study a master degree always has represented a goal that I hope to reach. Moreover, it represents an opportunity to help Guatemala, my country, which is a nation with a large energy history and depends on a high level from the energy field and needs people and technologies that can face with the issues and new challenges of today. Whereby, when I graduated from college last year (2018), I started to consider master programs in the field. Therefore, I am applying for a place on The Geophysics MSc that the University of California offers. I am very interested in the topics covered, particularly Computational Inverse Theory and Seismic Data Processing. Even though in Guatemala there are similar programs when I read the structure of your program, I noticed that there are topics that these programs do not cover and the course you offer does. Is particularly important in terms of my interest in the relationship between explanatory theories, furthermore, the chance to use sophisticated equipment and access to many geophysical processing and interpretation software packages. My interest in these particular areas was aroused during my last year in college when I was on an internship on the Exploration apartment in DACA (A Company who represents Guatemala in the oil and gas industry), where I was in touch with a lot of geosciences information. This was influential in determining my dissertation topic, I undertook it about the analysis of the seismic inversion and the applying of AVO (Amplitude VS Offset) analysis in a basin area. I am particularly interested to study at the School of Earth and Environment of the University of California because of the researches of The Institute of Applied Geoscience and The Institute of Geophysics and Tectonics, and also due to the school international reputation of excellence in these fields that attracts such a variety of students, providing me the opportunity to meet and work with many likeminded individuals from different nationalities around the world, and to live in one of the most beautiful cities in the world. I am a confident that my studies to date, have developed the academic skills necessary and makes me a suitable candidate to successfully manage this challenging and exciting program. I would relish the opportunity to study on your university, I hope you bestow me that honor.

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As result of a highly competitive globalized world, to study a master degree always has represented a goal that I hope to reach. Moreover, it represents an opportunity to help Mexico, my country, which is a nation with a large energy history and depends on a high level from the energy field and needs people and technologies that can face with the issues and new challenges of today. Whereby, when I graduated from college last year (2018), I started to consider master programs in the geophysics field. Therefore, I am applying for a place on The Geophysics MSc that the University of California offers. I am very interested in the topics covered, particularly Computational Inverse Theory and Seismic Data Processing. Even though in Mexico there are similar programs when I read the structure of your program, I noticed that there are topics that these programs do not cover and the course you offer does. Is particularly important in terms of my interest in the relationship between explanatory theories, furthermore, the chance to use sophisticated equipment and access to many geophysical processing and interpretation software packages.
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As result of a highly competitive globalized world, graduating with a Master's degree has always represented a goal that I hope to reach. Moreover, it represents an opportunity to help my country, Guatemala, my country, which is a nation with a large energy history (*what do you mean here?) and depends heavily on on a high level from the energy resources field. and For these reasons, Guatemala needs people and technologies that can face with the issues and new challenges of today. Whereby, When I graduated from college last year with a degree in ______ (2018), I started (began) to consider Master's programs in the field. Therefore, I am applying for a place on the Geophysics MSc that the University of California offers. Even though in Guatemala there are similar programs, when I read the structure of those offered by UC your program I noticed that there are topics that are not covered in Guatemala. these programs do not cover and the course you offer does.

I am very interested in the topics covered, particularly [or >Of particular interest to me are Computational Inverse Theory and Seismic Data Processing.

Is particularly important in terms of my interest in the relationship between explanatory theories, furthermore, the chance to use sophisticated equipment and access to many geophysical processing and interpretation software packages. (this one is very confusing to read, maybe we can translate together?)

My interest in these particular areas was aroused during my last year in college when I was on an internship on with the Exploration apartment (department?) in DACA (spell out abbreviated company). This company who represents Guatemala in the oil and gas industry. where While there, I was in touch with a lot (word choice) of geosciences information. This was influential in determining my dissertation topic, which I ultimately I undertook it about on the Analysis of the Seismic Inversion and the applying Application of AVO (Amplitude VS Offset) Analysis in a Basin Area. I am particularly interested to study at the School of Earth and Environment of at the University of California because of the research byes of The Institute of Applied Geoscience and The Institute of Geophysics and Tectonics, and also due to the school's international reputation of excellence in these fields. This attracts such a variety of students, providing me the opportunity to meet and work with many likeminded individuals from different nationalities around the world, and to live in one of the most beautiful cities in the world. I am a confident that my studies to date, have developed the academic skills necessary and makes me a suitable candidate to successfully manage this challenging and exciting program. I would relish the opportunity to study on at your university, and I hope you bestow upon me that honor.

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I just have editated, please if someone could check this. :)

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